Question

最近，你们学校开展了以“中国梦，我的梦”为主题的活动，作为一名中学生应该有自己的梦想， 你的梦想是什么呢？请以“My dream”为题写一篇英语短文。
要求：1.描述自己的梦想。
2. 如何实现这个梦想。
3. 80—100 个词左右，可适当发挥。
My dream

Answer 1

One possible version：
My dream
Everyone has his dream. My dream is to be a doctor. When I was in Grade Seven. I was sick and often went to see doctors. The doctors were very friendly to me and they often cheered me up. With the help of them, I was getting better. Now I’m very healthy. Since then I have hoped to become a doctor. In order to achieve my dream, I will study hard. I’ll give my love to the patients as much as possible and help them out of danger.
To be a doctor is really great. I think my dream will come true one day.

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，介绍自己的梦想以及如何实现它。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时、一般过去时和一般将来时，人称为单数第一、第三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：My dream is......；When I was......； Now I’m .......；In order to .......； I’ll give my love to......等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系，注意文后要表达自己梦想会实现的愿望。
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了自己的愿望，接下来介绍产生这个愿望的原因，最后指出如何实现自己的愿望。此处用了were very friendly to，cheered me up， hoped to，achieve my dream， as much as possible，out of danger 等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。