Question

【题目】书面表达：（15分）

假如今天是6月21日，你参加了学校组织的郊游活动。活动结束后，老师要求你们用英语写一篇日记，记录这次郊游。请根据下面的郊游活动安排完成这篇日记。内容可以适当发挥，不少于60词。

郊游地点	公园
郊游方式	......
和谁一起郊游	.....
郊游活动	上午拍照，中午野餐，下午钓鱼，......
郊游感受	.......

June 21st,

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Answer 1

【答案】

June 21st

Today our school organized a school trip. We went to the park. In the morning, we met at the school gate and went to the park by bus. All the students in Grade 7 attended it. We arrived there at half past 8. There were many people. In the morning, we took a lot of photos. And we had a picnic at noon. In the afternoon, we went fishing by the lake. We had a great time. Though we were tired, we were very happy.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们写一篇日记，记叙今天去公园郊游的情况，是一篇命题作文。题目中给了我们一些具体的信息，我们需要利用这些信息，把这一天的活动记录下来，如出发的时间、目的地、郊游的方式、人物、在公园里都做了些什么事情等等。通过分析可知，这篇作文记叙的是已经发生过的事情，因此应该用一般过去时态，我们需要注意将每句话中的谓语动词都变为过去式。写作时，我们可以按照时间的顺序来叙述，这样可以使整篇短文比较有条理，有秩序。而且我们还可以使用一些好的句型、连词以及短语等，使整篇短文的表达更加流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文，短文中作者按照题目的要求，给我们记叙了自己在学校的组织下去公园郊游的情况。首先，这篇短文的层次非常的清楚，作者按照时间的顺序，记录了自己在公园里所做的事情，非常的有条理；其次，作者使用了正确的人称和时态，这篇短文作者主要使用第一人称复数we，和一般过去时态，特别注意了动词过去式的变化，尤其是一些不规则动词的过去式，如went, had 等。短文中作者还使用了一些较好的句型，如There were many people、we took a lot of photos、In the afternoon, we went fishing by the lake、We had a great time. Though we were tired, we were very happy等。