Question

7．随着电子商务的发展，网上购物已经越来越流行了，请根据下列提示词，描述一下你第一次网购的经历．
要点与参考词汇：want to buy a book，excited，pay money，wait for a long time，broken，sad，call the seller，change，honest，at last，learn
写作要求：1．内容必须包括上面提示的要点，并可以适当发挥．
2．文章结构合理，条理清晰，语句连贯、行文流畅．
3．词数：80词左右．短文开头已给出，你可以选择使用，或者自己从头开始写．（如选用开头，请接着从下一行开始写，开头不计入总词数．如不选用开头，请空两行，自己从头开始写）

It is really convenient to shop online because of the development of the e-business．I still remember the experience that I shopped on taobao for the first time．I could find the book that I wanted in the bookstore．So I decided to buy a book online．I felt a little excited because it was my first time．After paying money online，I waited for a long time．
When the book arrived，it was broken．I felt really angry and called the seller．The seller agreed to change anther book for me．I learn that being honest is important in online shopping．At last I got the new book and felt happy．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是描述一下你第一次网购的经历．时态主要为一般过去时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．网购的经历
2．我的感受
常用到的重点短语：
want to do sth 想要做某事
decide to do sth 决定去做某事
wait for等…
fell+adj感觉怎样
agree to do sth赞同做某事
高分句型：
1．After paying money online，I waited for a long time．
after paying money online是个省略句，after用作介词，意为在…之后，表达的意义是after I paid money online，从句主语和主句的主语一致，从句中的主语可以省略．after后跟动名词．
2．I learn①that②being honest is important in online shopping．
①that引导的宾语从句，作为learn的宾语．
②being honest动名词短语做主语，谓语动词用单数is．

解答 It is really convenient to shop online because of the development of the e-business．I still remember the experience that I shopped on taobao for the first time．（点题，引出下文）
I could find the book that I wanted in the bookstore．So I decided to buy a book online．I felt a little excited because it was my first time．After paying money online，I waited for a long time．（高分句型）
When the book arrived，it was broken．I felt really angry and called the seller．The seller agreed to change anther book for me．At last I got the new book and felt happy．（经历））I learn that being honest is important in online shopping．（高分句型）（感受）

点评 本文是一篇给材料作文，短文的开头已经给出．写作时先要围绕这些要点组织材料，确定写作内容，注意将这些要点全部表达出来，并且要有适当的发挥，在谈到自己的观点时，要结合活动内容，写出自己的观点．