Question

请以“My dream”为题，写一篇短文。
1.　语句通顺流畅，时态正确。
2. 字数在80个字左右。

Answer 1

Everyone has his dream. My dream is to be a doctor. When I was in Grade Seven, I was sick and often went to see doctors. The doctors were very friendly to me and they often cheered me up. With the help of them, I was getting better. Now I’m very healthy. Since then I have hoped to become a doctor. In order to achieve my dream, I will study hard. I’ll give my love to the patients as much as possible and help them out of danger.
To be a doctor is really great. I think my dream will come true one day.

试题分析：这是一篇话题作文。话题贴近学生学习生活，学生有较大的发挥空间。动笔前要认真审题，挖掘深层内涵，勾勒要点，并适当发挥。根据话题可知本文主要是第一人称，行文时注意时态语及主谓一致问题，同时注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。
【亮点说明】这篇短文内容表达准确，意思连贯，符合逻辑。在文章的结构组织上很好地使用了简单句和复合句，使文章自然流畅。同时，使用了一些常用的句式和短语，如：be friendly to sb、cheered sb up、With the help of、Since then、hoped to do sth、In order to、as much as possible、help sb out of、come true等，这为文章增色不少。在学习中注意积累，牢记一些常用句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。