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最近，洛阳小伙扶摔倒老人被讹一事引起了社会的广泛关注，人们都在议论还该不该去做好事，帮助他人。而“Positive Energy”一词早已对我们中国人产生了很大影响，因此，很多人并不会因此就不去做好事了。瞧！你身边就有很多助人为乐的同学，他们的事例值得我们学习。请根据下面表格信息给学校校刊写一篇短文，谈谈身边的好人好事，号召大家向他们学习。词数60—80（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）

Who they are	What they usually do to help others
Liu Chang	make our school beautiful (clean the classroom..)
Li Bing	help other students with their studies…
Zhang Ling	help the people in trouble (cheer others up…)
…	…

Dear Editor,
In our school,some students are always thinking more of others and ready to help them.I am moved deeply.Here is what they usually do.
Liu Chang is a very good student.                                                             
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                                            
                                                                   
I hope everyone can learn from them and do something for others.
Yours, 
Mark 

Answer 1

Dear Editor，
　　In our school,some students are always thinking more of others and are ready to help them.I’m moved deeply.Here is what they usually do．
　　Liu Chang is a very good student．She often picks up rubbish and cleans the classroom to make our school more beautiful.LiBing studies well.So he often helps other students with their studies.We all like him.ZhangLing is outgoing.She likes cheering others up.If we are sad,she always talks with us and tries to make us happy.She is also helpful,She likes helping people who are in trouble.She is very popular in our school．
　　I hope everyone can learn from them and do something for others．
Yours, 
Mark

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文。本文所给材料比较详细，我们要做的就是用正确的英语把这些内容表达出来。动笔前要认真阅读材料，不可遗漏要点，并适当发挥。行文注意时态语时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。
【亮点说明】这篇短文覆盖了所有要点内容，语句自然流畅。同时使用了一些的常用句式和短语，为文章增色不少。如： make our school more beautiful让我们的学校变得更美丽，helps other students with their studies帮助其他同学学习，She likes helping people who are in trouble她喜欢帮助有困难的人，还有cheer sb up使某人振奋起来，talk with sb 和某人交谈，be helpful乐于助人等。在学习中注意积累，牢记一些常用句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。