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目前，就业形势越来越严峻。就业压力不仅是大学生无法回避的现实，也是高中生需要考虑的问题。就此你校编辑部开展了一次题为“就业危机对高中生的启示”的英语征文活动。请你根据以下提示，写一篇征文，阐明你的观点。
1. 努力学习，拓宽知识面； 2. 发展才能，提高个人素质；3. 加强合作精神，培养团队意识；
4. 了解社会需求，做好人生规划；  5. 你的观点……
注意：1. 词数120左右  2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯 3. 文章开头已写好，不计人总词数。
What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now. Being high school students, what can we learn from it?
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What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now. Being high school students, what can we learn from it?
To start with, we should put all our heart into study to broaden our knowledge in various fields. It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society. Additionally, learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do, for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly. Last but not least, as young generation in China, we’d better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands.
At present, I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed.I’ll spare no effort to study hard to accomplish my goal.

试题分析：本文是一篇提纲作文。写作时首先要仔细审题，确定人称，时态，文体。内容要点要全面，上下段要使用连接词做到连贯。我们在写作中应当遵循语言表述的经济原则，即用尽可能少的形式表达尽可能多的语义内容，力求简洁精练。根据提纲的提示，写出所列要点，要全面。我们在用词上应该仔细揣摩，准确清晰地表达我们的思想，剔除冗词赘语，使文章言简意赅。
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如：As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now，put all our heart into stuty to broaden our knowledge in various fields. improve our personal qualities，achieve our goals等。还运用了主语从句It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society等。并注意了句子的衔接如：To start with, Additionally, Last but not least等。
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