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17．手机给现代人生活带来许多便利，人们越来越离不开手机．你在暑期社会实践活动中，对手机的使用时宜行了调查，发现很多人在开车、过马路时．…都在使用手机，针对这一现象，请你按下列要点用英语写一篇100-120个词的短文，呼吁人们文明使用手机．
1．描述这一社会现象；
2．谈谈你的观点．
注意：开头已给出（不计词数），短文内容可适当发挥，注意行文贯通．
As is shown in a survey of social practice in summer vacation，mobile phone bring us much convenience in our daily life．However，an increasing number of people use mobile phones in improper situations，such as driving cars，crossing the roads or attending conferences．Such inappropriate behavior is likely to bring bad consequences．On one hand，using mobile phones this way may cause terrible accidents，which is really dangerous．On the other hand，talking loudly on the phone in public places is far from being polite．
Personally，I think we shouldn't use mobile phones where attention or silence is needed，for instance，in libraries，hospitals，or in a plane．Besides，relevant laws are supposed to be passed in order to guide people's use of cellphones so that they will acquire good habits in public．Only when everybody has the awareness of the negative impacts of improper use of phones can we create a more civilized society．．

Answer 1

分析 经典句型一：using mobile phones this way may cause terrible accidents，which is really dangerous．用这种方式使用手机可能会引起可怕的事故，这一点真的很危险．这是一个非限制性定语从句，which为关系代词指代整个主句的意思．
经典句型二：Only when everybody has the awareness of the negative impacts of improper use of phones can we create a more civilized society．只有人人都意识到不合适的场合用手机的消极面，我们才能创造一个更加文明的社会．这是一个倒装句，only引导的状语置于句首句子要做部分倒装 can we create a more civilized society．

解答 As is shown in a survey of social practice in summer vacation，mobile phone bring us much convenience in our daily life．However，an increasing number of people use mobile phones in improper situations，such as driving cars，crossing the roads or attending conferences．（经典句型一）Such inappropriate behavior is likely to bring bad consequences．On one hand，using mobile phones this way may cause terrible accidents，which is really dangerous．On the other hand，talking loudly on the phone in public places is far from being polite．【第一段描述现象】
Personally，I think we shouldn't use mobile phones where attention or silence is needed，for instance，in libraries，hospitals，or in a plane．Besides，relevant laws are supposed to be passed in order to guide people's use of cellphones so that they will acquire good habits in public．Only when everybody has the awareness of the negative impacts of improper use of phones can we create a more civilized society（经典句型二）．【第二段阐明自己的观点】

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实 的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．