Question

Three Umbrellas
Sally was a college student in London. She wanted to buy her mother a nice and useful birthday present, but not too expensive.
One day after a quick and simple lunch, she went shopping. Having looked for half an hour, she came across a shop selling umbrellas at a good price. So she decided to take one.
She thought, “Mom can carry it when she is wearing clothes of any color.” Then she bought a lovely black umbrella and took it to school with her until her class finished.
On her way home in the train that evening she felt hungry, so she went to the buffet car.  She left the black umbrella above her seat. But when she got back, she found it was gone! 
Sally burst into tears. The other passengers felt very sorry for her and asked what was wrong. When she explained the black umbrella she had bought for her mother had disappeared, and that she had to get off at the next station, the three other passengers asked her for her mother’s address so that they could send the umbrella to her in case someone returned it after Sally got off the train.
The next week, Sally got a letter from her mother saying “Thank you very much for your lovely presents, but why did you send me three black umbrellas?”
[写作内容]
1. 以约30个词概括短文的要点;
2. 然后以约120个词写一篇短文，并包括如下要点:
(1) 所读故事对你的启发;
(2) 记叙一个与该故事中Sally或陌生人的行为相类似的故事;
(3) 你对亲人的感恩或对他人善心的感激。
[写作要求]
1. 在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
3. 标题自定。
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

Love our mother
Sally, a college student, bought her mother an umbrella as a birthday present but lost it on the train. Moved by her kindness and respect for her mother, some passengers on the train sent her mother three umbrellas.
Sally loved her mother and remembered her mother’s birthday. As a 17-year-old girl, I love my mother very much as well. I send my mother flowers on Mother’s Day. Last year, on mother’s 45^th birthday, I bought my mother a very good comb from store. When I showed it to my mother and told her it was good for her health to comb her hair often, she burst into tears and then smiled to my father and me. Never had I imagined that a simple gift would make her so moved.
Mother’s love is the most precious in the world. I think we can show our love for our mother by doing small things. What is most important is to our love every day.
One possible version:
Love and get loved
Some strangers sent Sally’s mother three umbrellas after they saw Sally in tears because she had lost the umbrella she would send her mother as a birthday present.
From the story of three umbrellas, we can see that people will love you in return if you give love to others. When I was 16 years old, I was in hospital for a small operation. It was difficult for me to reach out my hands for drinks or food. An old lady who was taking care of her husband in the room often came to my bedside to help me. Furthermore, she often told funny stories and made my days there full of joy. She prepared delicious soup for me and her husband. I have been very grateful to her for all that she did. Last year, at her 56^th birthday, I sent her a big birthday cake and spent a good day at her home. Love is a two-way street. Love others, and then you will get loved.

试题分析：这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，再以约120个词写一篇短文，内容包括：（(1) 所读故事对你的启发; (2) 记叙一个与该故事中Sally或陌生人的行为相类似的故事; (3) 你对亲人的感恩或对他人善心的感激。这道题目要求比较严格，所以在写作之前一定要看清题目。题目还要求1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己不会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
点评：本文属于根据原文内容写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。