Question

假设今天是7月12日，星期六，天气晴朗，你和全班同学到南郊公园游玩。 请根据以下内容，以日记的形式记叙今天你的出游情况。
1.       上午乘车1小时到达目的地，爬山，唱歌 ， 做游戏。
2.       中午吃完饭午餐后组织一个小活动，向游客宣传环保的重要性
3.       下午4点返回
注意：1.词数 100 左右
2. 可适当增加细节，使行文连贯

Answer 1

 
Today I went on a trap to Nanjiao Park with all my classmates .After an hour ‘s ride, we arrived there. As soon as we got there, we began to climb the hill . All the way up , we sang happily. On the top of the hill, we played some interesting games . All of us enjoyed ourselves very much.
After we had our picnic at noon we organized an activity, talking to the visitors about the importance of protecting the environment. At about 4 in the afternoon we returned.
We not only had a good time but also did a good deed today. Though I am tired now ,I feel quite happy.

试题分析：本文是日记题材，学生很容易能把握写作要求与目的。考生在写作之前必须认真审题，首先注意作文时态，用一般过去时，并且用第一人称。再有注意不能逐句翻译，注意句子之间的衔接，句法流畅，逻辑关系严谨。
【亮点说明】 文中 用了很多非常好的短语 ，如as soon as ,not only ,but also,enjoy oneself 等。还运用了though引导状语从句，talking to 做伴随状语。使文章的结构更加紧凑，更有逻辑性。并且文章还运用高级词汇如 importance ,environment, return, 为文章增色不少，提高文章档次。