Question

你的朋友Susan转学了,但是到了新的环境遇到了一些交友的困难。作为朋友,你很想给她点建议。于是你写了一封信,鼓励她努力适应新的环境。要点如下:
1. 要自信,自信的人交友时才有魅力；
2. 与人微笑,交谈时要目视对方；
3. 主动邀请同学一起学习或者就餐时坐在一起；
4. 培养和与人分享你的兴趣爱好。
注意: 1. 词数120左右；2. 可适当增加细节。

Answer 1

Dear Susan
I’m sorry to hear that you are not getting along well with the students in the new school. So I’d like to give you some tips.
First, be as confident as you can. There’s nothing that attracts people more than someone who has a fairly positive attitude towards life ,Next, make eye contact with others ,smile at them when they look at you ,and laugh when they say something that’s funny, it makes you seem friendly. Third, invite others to do things together, For example, you can ask them to do small talk. It’s better to develop and share your interest with them.
Last but not least ,don’t be too hard on yourself .Making new friends takes a lot of time and effort You should be patient.
Best wishes and good luck!
Yours,
Lily

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来.平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【亮点说明】所给范文条理清晰，语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组和句子：get along well with和…相处，be hard on 对…严厉，There’s nothing that attracts people more than someone who has a fairly positive attitude to wards life , 这句话用了两个定语从句，It’s better to develop and share your interest with them.,这句话用了it做形式主语， Making new friends takes a lot of time and effort 这句话用了动名词做主语，还有文章还使用了 First, Next, Third, Last but not least这样的关联词使文章更加连贯。