Question

【题目】书面表达（满分10分）

请你以 “A trip to...”为题写一篇短文，介绍自己印象最深的一次旅游。文章需涉及到以下信息：Time, place, people, what you saw, what you did and your feeling.

注意：

1、文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；

2、语言通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；

3、词数80左右。

A trip to

Answer 1

【答案】A trip to Beijing

Last year, I visited Beijing. I always looked forward to visiting there. So I was so excited that I couldn’t fall asleep on the night before I started. I got up early and packed my backpack for the journey. It took me five hours to get there by train. I went to the Great Wall and saw many people there. The Great Wall is very long. Though I was very tired, I was very happy. I also went to the Tian’an Men Square. It is very big. I was very excited because I have learned a lot about the city.

【解析】试题分析：这篇作文要求我们记叙自己的一次旅行，是一篇话题作文，具体的内容需要我们自己来组织。我们的短文中应包括以下内容：首先是你去了哪里，在那里做了些什么，看到了什么；其次还应该有你对这次旅行的感受。通过分析可知，这篇短文记叙的是你过去的一次经历，故整篇短文应使用一般过去时态，第一人称来叙述。我们要特别注意每句话中谓语动词形式的变化，都要用过去式形式，尤其要注意一些不规则动词的形式变化。写作时，我们可以使用一些好的句型和短语，使文章的表达更加流畅。

【写作亮点】这是一篇偶像的作文，短文中作者给我们记叙了他去北京的一次旅行，短文中告诉了我们作者什么时候去的，他都去了哪些地方，在那些地方都做了些什么事。另外作者还对这次旅行发表了自己的感受。整篇短文的叙述非常完整，语句也很流畅，符合英语的表达规范。短文中作者使用了正确的时态，注意了动词过去式形式的变化。短文中一些较好的短语和句型有：I always looked forward to visiting there、So I was so excited that I couldn’t fall asleep on the night before I started.、It took me five hours to get there by train、though I was very tired, I was very happy、I was very excited because I have learned a lot about the city等。