Question

【题目】写作

假设你叫李俊，你的美国朋友David想要在中国结交更多的朋友。你通过电子邮件，把你的最好的朋友Tom介绍给他。王明情况见下表：

姓名	Tom
年龄	15
外貌	方脸，大眼睛，短发，高个子；
个性	诚实，幽默，替朋友保守秘密；
爱好	喜欢野生动物，如···
其他情况	1. 对了解不同种类的鸟类也感兴趣； 2. 最喜欢冬季，因为他喜欢堆雪人，打雪仗。
理想	保护动物，阻止人们打猎和杀死动物。原因：1.....；2.....

要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下连贯；

2）必须包括所有相关信息，并作适当发挥；

3）词数：80词左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；

4）不使用真实姓名和校名等。

Dear David,

How are you? I’m writing to introduce my best friend Tom to you.

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I hope you can make friends with him as soon as you can. Maybe he can show you around our country at the Spring Festival.

Best wishes,

Li Jun

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear David,

How are you? I’m writing to introduce my best friend Wang Ming to you.He is 15 years old. He is tall with two big eyes. He is tall and has short hair.Wang Ming has a good sense of humor. He often tells us funny stories and makes us happy. He is also an honest boy and he can keep secrets for his friends. He never says a bad word about others.He is crazy about DIY. It was my birthday last week. He made a birthday card for me. He is interested in learning about different kinds of birds and now he is a member of the Birdwatching Society. Among/Of the four seasons, he likes winter best because he likes making snowmen and having snowball fights with his friends.He has a good voice and is good at singing. So he wants to be a singer when he grows up.I hope you can make friends with him as soon as you can. Maybe he can show you around our country at the Spring Festival.

Best wishes,

Li Jun

【解析】

试题分析：本题是提纲作文，给出假设中你的朋友的所有信息，让你介绍给另外一个朋友。要以书信的形式书写。作文内容基本已给出，但是不可逐条翻译。文章要连贯，有中心主旨，有重点。适当的需要把所给信息进行整合或重组，构成一篇完整连贯具有说服力的信。另外，要注意文章的人称，时态以及写信要注意到的写作方式。

写作亮点：所给例文完整地把题中要求的信息表达出来。并且文章结构紧凑，表达清楚，语言连贯。简单描写了王明的外貌年龄等的基本信息之后，重点描写了王明的爱好和兴趣以及对友谊的重视。另外，文章语言简练，用词恰当。并且用到了一些短语，是文章内容更加紧凑生动，比如，be crazy about，fight with等等。也准确运用了少量的复合句。