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提示：假如你是Mike，请根据下面所给的Mike的family tree，以My Family为题，写一篇小短文。要求条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确，书写清晰规范。要将所给的内容全部体现在短文中：Mr Jim Brown警察40岁，Mrs Brown英语教师37岁，Ann Brown光明中学三年级二班13岁，Mike Brown立达中学一年级四班11岁。

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参考答案： 　　Hello, friends! My name is Mike Brown. Please come and meet my family. My father is Jim Brown. He's 40. He's a policeman. My mother is Lily Brown. She's 37. She's an English teacher. I have a sister. Her name is Ann Brown. She is thirteen. She's in Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School. I'm eleven. I'm in the same school, but I'm in Class Four, Grade One. Look! This is my family! 　　【解析】这是一篇“提示＋图表”形式的书面表达题。做题时首先要围绕提供的信息进行认真的审题，通过审题要明确以下两点主要要求： 　　1．要以“My Family”为题写一篇不少于60个单词的小短文。 　　2．短文一定要以第一人称的口吻来写。 　　其次，同过审题明确要求之后，就要列出要点： 　　1) my name, Mike Brown 　　2) my father, Jim Brown, 40, policeman 　　3) my mother, Lily Brown, 37, an English teacher 　　4) have a sister, Ann Brown, 13, Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School 　　5) I, eleven, in the same school, in Class Four, Grade One 　　3．在列出的要点之间加上适当的词或词组，把要点组合初稿。在组合过程中尤其要注意谓语动词与人称之间的一致性，同时注意标点符号和大小写。 　　初稿如下： 　　My name is Mike Brown. My father is Jim Brown. He's 40. He's a policeman. My mother is Lily Brown. She's 37. She's an English teacher. I have a sister. Her name is Ann Brown. She is thirteen. She's in Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School. I'm eleven. I'm in the same school. I'm in Class Four, Grade One. 　　4．形成初稿后，要根据提示要求进一步复查，检查是否有要点遗漏，谓语动词是否运用准确，单词是否有拼写错误，大小写、标点符号是否都正确。另外还要检查词数是否符合规定的要求，整个短文的意思是否连贯。根据这些要求，通过对上面初稿的复查，觉得短文的词数还太少，且短文单调。因此，我们可以将短文修改为下面的短文。