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10．母爱情深，母爱无价．学会感恩，学会回报．某英语网站举办以"My mother"为主题的英语征文活动．请你根据下面表格提供的信息，写一篇短文．
提示：1．短文应包括表格中的全部信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，段落分明．
2．短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名．
3．词数90词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数．

写作要点写作要点 3	1．介绍自己的母亲，信息包括年龄、外貌特征、工作、特长、兴趣和爱好．
	2．描述母亲为自己做了什么以及自己的感受．
	3．你将做什么来回报母爱．

My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．．（介绍年龄外貌工作等）My mother is 41 years old．She is a woman of medium build with long black hair．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball．Her hobby is reading．
（妈妈为我做的事）She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（我的感受）I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me．
（将来我要做什么回报）When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．．

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分析 这是一篇提纲作文，短文的开头已经给出．写作内容应该包括：1．母亲的有关信息（年龄、外貌、工作、特长、兴趣和爱好）．2．母亲为我做的一件事或几件事以及我的感受．3．以后怎么来回报母爱．当描述母亲为我做的事的时候，时态要用一般过去时，描述母亲的信息时时态要用一般现在时，以后如何去回报母亲，应该用一般将来时态，用第三人称及第一人称．重点短语及句型She is a woman of medium build with long black hair，She bought whatever I needed for my study，When I grow up，I will …等等

解答 答案：My Mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．（介绍年龄外貌工作等）My mother is 41 years old．She is a woman of medium build with long black hair．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball．Her hobby is reading．
（妈妈为我做的事）She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（我的感受）I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me．
（将来我要做什么回报）When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．

点评 这是一篇给材料作文，短文的开头已经给出．本作文中给出的要点比较简略，动笔前先要围绕这些要点阻止材料，确定写作内容，注意将这些要点全部表达出来，不要偏离文章中心．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合文章要表达的主题，不能出现文章脱节问题．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．