Question

Write at least 60 words on the topic “I’d like to make...feel happy ” 以《我想使……高兴》为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。

（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Suggested phrases and expressions(词组): not afford to buy...; spend ...doing something with somebody; bake something for somebody; make one’s own present(s) ; become healthier

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Answer 1

I’d like to make _my mother_ feel happy

Mother love is so great and selfless that ①I can never do too much to make my mother feel happy in return. ②With the approach of Mother’s Day, I want to ③extend my gratitude to my dear mom. Since as a student, I can’t afford to buy something expensive, such as perfume, clothes, I have decided to make my own present. ④Hard as I tried, ⑤it’s never easy to bake a perfect cake for the first time. After finishing my homework, I have spent most of my time practicing baking with my father these days. I just can’t wait to share the gift for her and see the big smile on her face.

【解析】

试题分析：现在普遍的情况是学生会写议论文，因为有套路可循。但是在中考中，还是会以记叙类的文章为主。那么我们一起来看一下如何把记叙类的文章写的条理清晰。文章行文思路是：1 开篇写母爱伟大，并引出母亲节想为母亲做些什么的想法，开门见山，点题，并与时事结合。 2 使用给出的建议词组（也可不用），表达为什么要亲手做礼物，和做礼物过程中的不容易 3 以迫不及待想要把礼物给母亲的心情收尾，the big smile再一次点题。

【亮点说明】亮点一：使用can never… too… “再怎么怎么样也不为过”的句式，也可替换为can’t… too…，最经典的例句：It’s never too old to learn. 活到老学到老。

亮点二：With the approach of Mother’s Day, = As Mother’s Day is coming，用介词结构短语比较新颖。

亮点三：extend one’s gratitude to/towards sb. 表达谢意，学过新二的同学一定见过，要活学活用哦！

亮点四：让步状语从句用as引导时的倒装用法。

亮点五：it’s never easy to do = it’s difficult to do，有的时候只需要转一个弯，句式就会富有变化。强调了自己做礼物给妈妈的不容易，更凸显礼物珍贵。

考点：命题作文。