Question

假设母亲节即将来临，请你借此机会给你母亲写封信（ 不少于８０词 ），和她谈谈心里话。

要点：

１、母亲辛勤工作，目的是让我过上更好的生活，受到更好的教育

2、平时，母亲把家里打理得井井有条，节假日，带我出去玩乐

3、母亲经常与我沟通交流，在学习上对我严格要求，成绩不理想时，鼓励我不放弃；在生活中，遇到困难时，叫我要笑对生活

表达对母亲的感谢与祝福

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

Dear mom,

Mother’s Day is coming. I have something to share with you.

You work hard every day in order to make me have a better life and get a better education. You usually do housework and make our home clean and tidy. On holidays, you take me outside to enjoy myself.

You often have a talk with me and are strict with my study. When I have a bad grade, you encourage me not to give up. When I have difficulty, you teach me to face the life with a smile. I am deeply moved by what you have done for me.

I want to express my wish and thanks to you. I wish you happy and healthy every day. I will study hard and get good grade to make you proud of me.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以母亲节即将到来为背景，给母亲写一封信，跟母亲说说心里话。关于母亲的话题，在平时的学习中接触比较多，因此这一类的词汇和句型学生还是比较熟悉的。并且在题目中给我们列出了写作的提纲，我们可以按照题目给出的内容，用正确的英语表达出来。按照提纲我们可以分成几个方面，一是母亲一边把家里打理得井井有条，一边辛勤工作，让我受到更好的教育；二是母亲对我们的鼓励和教育；最后是对母亲的感谢和祝福。通过审题可知，这篇短文我们应该主要使用第二人称和第一人称，一般现在时态。写作时，要多使用一些连词和短语，注意长短句结合，使文章的表达流畅，富有节奏。

【亮点说明】这是一篇比较优秀的作文。这篇短文中作者根据题目中给出的提纲，将一个孩子想对母亲说的话有条理的表达了出来。首先，作者描写的是母亲为了自己能受到良好的教育而辛勤工作；接下来作者用两个排比句，描写了母亲对自己的鼓励和教育；最后一段中作者向母亲表达了感谢和祝福。三段短文下来，很有层次，使整篇文章也非常有秩序。短文中作者使用了一些较好的句型，如You work hard every day in order to make me have a better life and get a better education、When I have a bad grade, you encourage me not to give up. When I have difficulty, you teach me to face the life with a smile、I am deeply moved by what you have done for me、I will study hard and get good grade to make you proud of me等。

考点：提纲类作文。