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4．提示：在每个人的成长过程中，有些因素对人的成长具有重要的作用．如，一桩事、一件物、一个人、一段经历、一次体验…．请你就其中的一个进行描述，与大家分享．
要求：内容切题、语句通顺、意思连贯、字迹清楚．
（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分．）
I used tobe a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me．Now I'd like to say I've changed a lot．In fact，all is because of my mother'sdiaries．One day I saw my mother'sdiary book by accident while I was looking for my notebook．I was curious and began to read my mother's diaries．In her diaries，she showedher deep love for me．She a becauseof lso expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes．She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy．I couldn't help crying after reading my mother's diaries．Since that day，I havechanged a lot．I work hard and share some housework．I also try to understand my mother's feelings．．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
I①used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to②be angry with me．我曾经是一个淘气的男孩，我的母亲曾经对我生气．
①used to be或used to do sth指过去常常怎么样或做某事
②be angry with sb对某人生气
高分句型二：
I ①couldn't help crying②after reading my mother's diaries．在阅读了我母亲的日记后，我忍不住哭了起来．
①can't help doing sth情不自禁做某事
②after引导的时间状语从句，后跟动名词

解答 I used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me．【高分句型一】Now I'd like to say I've changed a lot．【前后的变化对比】In fact，all is because of my mother'sdiaries．One day I saw my mother'sdiary book by accident while I was looking for my notebook．I was curious and began to read my mother's diaries．In her diaries，she showedher deep love for me．She a becauseof lso expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes．She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy．I couldn't help crying after reading my mother's diaries．【高分句型二】Since that day，I have changed a lot．I work hard and share some housework．I also try to understand my mother's feelings．【具体讲述一件事情说明变化的原因】

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