Question

18．你一定去过很多地方旅游，你印象最深的是哪里呢？把你的开心分享给大家吧！请你写篇80词左右的旅游经历吧．
以下内容仅供参考，也可自行安排内容．
时间：…
地点：南京、北京、海南…
人物：和谁一起去的
活动：游览、拍照、划船…
名胜：玄武湖、天安门、长城、天涯海角…
食物：北京烤鸭、水果…
交通工具：汽车、火车、飞机…

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一 
When we arrived there，we were very excited，just like the high temperrature there!当我们到那里时，我们都很兴奋，就像那的高温一样．这是when引导的时间状语从句，当…时候．
 高分句型二
On the last day，we went to Disney Land Ocean Park，a theme park which has something like Disneyland Park．最后一天，我们去了迪士尼乐园海洋公园，这个主题公园有点像迪斯尼乐园．which has something like Disneyland Park是定语从句，修饰先行词  a theme park．

解答 Have you ever been to Hongkong？I really had a wonderful time in Hongkong last summer vacation．【开篇点明主题】
We went there by air．When we arrived there，we were very excited，just like the high temperrature there!【高分句型一，注意时间状语从句的使用】On the first day，we visited the Disneyland Park．I played the roller coaster，sky wheel and so on．What most unforgettable was that I took many photos with Mickey Mouse and Donal Duck．On the second day，we went shopping and bought a lot of things．I bought many shirts in different style．On the last day，we went to Disney Land Ocean Park，a theme park which has something like Disneyland Park．【高分句型二，注意定语从句的使用】【正文部分详细介绍旅行经历】
I really enjoyed myself in Hongkong．【结尾紧扣主题】

点评 动笔前应先认真阅读材料，围绕所给材料组织内容，确定主要短语，句式等问题．注意不要遗漏要点，句子要通顺连贯，没有语法错误．