Question

【题目】书面表达(13分)

某英文网站提出“走路去上学”的倡议，请你就这一话题写一篇约100词的英语文章；内容可包括：走路有利健康，和朋友结伴有利于……让父母节省……使城市……等等，可适当发挥。

注意：文中不得出现真实人名、校名等相关信息。

参考词汇：be good for, with friends, save

Answer 1

【答案】

I think going to school on foot is good for us. First of all, walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise and it’s good for our health. Next, it’s fun to walk together with friends every day. We can talk about something interesting and know each other better. What’s more, if we walk, our parents won’t have to drive us to school. There will be fewer cars in the city. More walking and less driving help to make our city cleaner. The streets won’t be as crowded as they are now. I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇命题作文，一封倡议书。在要点中给出了写作的大致方向，需要自己发挥的地方较多。动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥，确定时态主要词汇等问题。写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上，为了让表达更符合逻辑，可以适当使用序数词；语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。

写作亮点：本文语言丰富，结构严谨。用了大量的复合句：I think going to school on foot is good for us. What’s more, if we walk, our parents won’t have to drive us to school. There will be fewer cars in the city. I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.特别是First of all, Next, What’s more,的使用，使文章更加顺畅，表达更符合逻辑。最后一句的倡议很有号召力，是一篇上等的佳作。