Question

书面表达（20分）

据报道，有位贫穷的妈妈，这些年来得到许多好心人的帮助。她把每一笔捐赠都已记录了下来，为的是让女儿学会感恩。

请你写一篇发言稿，要点如下：

1.简述以上事件；

2.你的感想：感恩对每一个人都很重要；感谢父母的照顾，感谢老师的教育，感谢同学的帮助；

3.号召同学们做些感恩的事（列举2个事例）

注意：1. 表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；

2. 演讲稿应包括上面所有要点，并作适当发挥；

3. 词数：100左右（文章开头和结尾已给，不计入总词数）；

4. 短文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。

Hello, everyone!

I’m here today to talk about being grateful to others. It is reported that

 

 

 

 

 

In a word, we should do what we can to express our thanks.

That’s all, thank you.

 

Answer 1

Hello, everyone!

I’m here today to talk about being grateful to others. It is reported that a poor mother has got/received a lot of help from others. She has written down every donation to let her daughter learn to be grateful/so that her daughter learns to be grateful.

I think it is important for everyone to learn to be grateful. Being grateful is very important to everyone. For example, we should thank our parents for caring for/taking care of/looking after us in daily life. We are supposed to be thankful to our teachers for educating us. We ought to be grateful to our classmates for their help.

So we should do something to others. We can help Mother do the housework, such as doing some cleaning, washing dishes, and doing some cooking. We can send some cards or flowers to our teachers on Teachers’ Day. We can also come back to visit our teacher after we graduate.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇短文要求我们以感恩为主题写一篇作文。在题目中给了我们这篇短文的写作提纲，主要包括三部分的内容。一是简述贫穷妈妈这个事件；二是你的感想：感恩对每一个人都很重要；感谢父母的照顾，感谢老师的教育，感谢同学的帮助；三是号召同学们做些感恩的事（列举2个事例）。提纲虽然已经列好，但是很多内容都需要我们自己去充实，让它变得完整、合理，内容丰富，这就需要花费我们的想象力，以及我们平时积累的知识。另外，写作时，还需注意语句间的衔接，使文意连贯，表达流畅。

【亮点说明】这是一篇比较不错的作文。作者从三个方面，讲述了我们要学会感恩，层次非常的清晰。短文中需要作者自己补充的内容完成得也不错。如We can help Mother do the housework, such as doing some cleaning, washing dishes, doing some cooking. We can send some cards or flowers to our teachers on Teachers’ Day等。这些内容都比较贴合文章的需要，意思也很连贯。文章中还用了一些比较好的句型，如For example, we should thank our parents for caring for/taking care of/looking after us in daily life. We are supposed to be thankful to our teachers for educating us.等。

考点：提纲类作文。