Question

18．"安全重于泰山"，尤其是学生们的安全更是牵动着无数人的心．交通安全、饮食安全、人生安全…无不和我们的生活息息相关．请你以"How to Keep Safe？"为题，说说学生应该如何保证自己的安全，写一篇80字左右的英语短文．
要求：1．根据以上提示，适当发挥．
2．文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名．
3．给出自己合理化的建议．
4．开头部分已给出，不记入总字数．


How to Keep Safe？
Every day we hear lots of traffic，food and some other safety problems．Nowadays，the safety problem is one of the most serious problems we have to care about，especially the students'safety．As a student，it is very important to know how to keep safe．We must obey the traffic rules and mustn't play on the street．We shouldn't eat too much junk food because it's bad for our health．We all like sports，but remember to do warm-up activities before doing sports and drink some water after that．When we are surfing the Internet，we can't tell strangers our personal information．Don't believe in strangers'words．We should learn to protect ourselves so that we stay away from danger．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"How to Keep Safe？"为题，说说学生应该如何保证自己的安全．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1交通安全：遵守交通规则，不要在路上玩耍
2食品安全：不要吃太多垃圾食品
3运动安全：做热身运动
4网络安全：不要告诉陌生人自己的私人信息
5其他
常用到的重点短语：
obey rules 遵守规则
too much 太多
be bad for 对…不利
remember to do sth 记着去做某事
believe in 相信
stay away from 远离
【高分句型】
1．We shouldn't eat①too much junk food②because ③it's bad for our health．
①too much 太多
②because引导的原因状语从句．
③be bad for 对…不利
2．We should ①learn to protect ourselves②so that we③stay away from danger．
①learn to do sth 学会做某事
②so that引导的目的状语从句．
③stay away from 远离

解答 How to Keep Safe？
Every day we hear lots of traffic，food and some other safety problems．Nowadays，the safety problem is one of the most serious problems we have to care about，especially the students'safety．As a student，it is very important to know how to keep safe．We must obey the traffic rules and mustn't play on the street．（交通安全）We shouldn't eat too much junk food because it's bad for our health．【高分句型】（食品安全）We all like sports，but remember to do warm-up activities before doing sports and drink some water after that．（运动安全）When we are surfing the Internet，we can't tell strangers our personal information．（网络安全）Don't believe in strangers'words．（其他：不要相信陌生人）We should learn to protect ourselves so that we stay away from danger．【高分句型】

点评 初中英语的作文，着重考察学生连词成句的能力，要在"准"字上下功夫．在写作中注意人称与谓语动词的数关系和动词时态等诸多方面．在对所出现的问题或是采取的措施描写中注意使用连词或是好的句式如have a  far-reaching effect on sth对…有深远的影响，only 置于句首的倒装及only when …，can we…等．对于中学作文的写作，尽量将所学的知识运用到作文中，写出富于变化、结构紧凑的文章，不要出现中式英文．在平时的练习中，注意多背诵范文，对于写的好的句子进行默写，考试时就能写出准确地道的作文．