Question

【题目】初级写作（15分）

请根据下列表格的提示, 写一篇题为Changes in My Hometown的短文。（80词左右）

内容要点:

过去 现在

1.旧房 1.高楼

2.河水肮脏 2.河水清澈

3.步行、骑自行车上班 3.乘公交车、小汽车上班

4.道路狭窄 4.环形路宽阔

5.居住条件差 5.居住环境舒适

Changes in My Hometown

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Answer 1

【答案】

Changes in My Hometown

My hometown is very big town / village with green trees all around, people live a rich life.

However, people used to live old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were hard. People went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings and big department stores in my hometown. The river is clean and the water is clear. There are many ring roads and the living conditions are comfortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car. A lot of people have their own cars. Everyone protects the environment. Many tourists go to my hometown for sightseeing

I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. I think my hometown will be much more beautiful in the future.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文，让我们根据所给材料写一封邀请信，邀请全班同学参加一个活动，材料中有详细的时间及活动安排，我们要用正确的时态按照时间顺序把这一天的行程表达清楚。通过分析可知，本篇短文应主要用一般将来时，第一人称复数表达。写作时注意行文连贯，表达清楚，不要遗漏要点。并且多使用好的短语和句型以使文章流畅。

写作亮点：这篇作文写得比较清楚，详细，对材料中的时间及活动安排表达的很清楚，并且按时间顺序交代了这一天的行程。写作的人称和时态都切合题意。并且文中也用了一些较好的句型，这些句型的使用使文章流畅，富有条理。