Question

【题目】书面表达(满分15分)

每个人都有自己的梦想，努力坚持终能实现。请根据下面表格中所提供的信息用英文写一篇短文。

要求：所写内容必须包括表格中的所有信息，可适当发挥；

词数：80左右(开头与结尾已经给出，不计入总词数).

Tom	1．出身贫寒，付不起学费，但一直自学，考取了大学； 2．上大学时坚持打零工(part-time job) 自食其力。 3．坚持梦想 (follow one’s dream)，拥有了自己的公司。
You	你的梦想	……（内容自拟）
	如何实现你的梦想	1．勤奋学习； 2．……（内容自拟）

Everyone has his dream. The one who never gives up can achieve his goal. Tom is a good example. _______________________________________________________________________________

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I will never give up my dream whenever facing difficulties. I’m sure my dream will come true.

Answer 1

【答案】

Everyone has his dream. The one who never gives up can achieve his/her goal. Tom is a very good example. He was born in a poor family. His parents didn't have enough money to pay for his study so that he couldn't go to school. He was very sad, but nothing could stop him from studying. He kept on learning by himself at home. At last, he got high grades and entered his ideal college. In the college, he did part-time jobs for a living and worked hard at his study. Because he followed his dream all the time, he became the owner of a large farm successfully.

I have my own dream, too. I want to be a teacher to help the children in poor areas. From now on, I must work hard, correct my own shortcomings and improve myself.

I will never give up my dream whenever facing difficulties. I'm sure my dream will come true.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们来讲述一下如何实现自己的梦想，题目中给出了我们具体的写作内容，我们先要介绍一下Tom是怎么实现自己的梦想的，然后再谈一谈自己的梦想是什么，如何来实现自己的梦想。通过分析可知，这篇短文中第一部分，在介绍Tom这个具体事例的时候，我们应该用一般过去时态；叙述自己的梦想时，用一般现在时态。我们要注意动词的正确形式，尤其是动词过去式的不规则变化。另外，写作时，我们也应使用一些平时积累的较好的短语和句型，来使整篇短文的表达更加流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文，短文中作者按照题目的要求，先介绍了Tom是如何实现自己的梦想的，然后又联系到自己，叙述了自己的梦想，以及实现梦想的决心。短文中作者使用丰富的句型和短语，如The one who never gives up can achieve his/her goal，这句话中作者使用了一个定语从句；His parents didn't have enough money to pay for his study so that he couldn't go to school这句话中使用了so that 引导的结果状语从句；He was very sad, but nothing could stop him from studying这句中使用了stop sb. from doing sth.这一句型，表示阻止某人做某事；Because he followed his dream all the time, he became the owner of a large farm successfully这句中使用了because引导的原因状语从句；I will never give up my dream whenever facing difficulties.这句中使用了whenever后跟现在分词形式。这些句型的使用提升了作文的档次。