Question

7．生活中有很多感人的人或事，如"2016感动中国"中为了使命，执着于千百次实验的屠呦呦，化作光明烛的莫振高等等．相信你在生活中也做了一些事感动了别人，请以I moved        为题介绍一下你做了何事，感动了何人．
要求：1在题目空格处填入你要描述的对象，如我的父母、我的老师、我的同桌等；
2文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
380词左右．
I moved                                                   ．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文，根据所给要求，先补全作文题目，再围绕话题，写一篇语意完整，语法正确，表达流畅的短文．写作时，不得出现真实姓名和学校名称，80词左右．注意适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．可以采用以下句型：
高分句型一：I am the apple of their eyes．我是他们的掌上明珠．
高分句型二：My parents were glad to see it and were moved by my action．（我父母看到此很高兴，被我的行动感动了．）

解答 I moved my parents．
  I am the only child in my family，so my parents love me very much．I am the apple of their eyes．（掌上明珠）（高分句型一） I become a naughty（淘气的） and lazy boy．I dislike doing anything but play computer games．My parents are worried about me．They always try their best to change me．At my heart，I want to change myself and become a good boy．（这一段主要介绍我自己的行为．）
  Last week，I learned how to cook fish at school．I decided to cook it for my parents on the weekend．I went shopping for a fish．I cleaned up the fish and cooked it alone at home before my parents came back．When they returned，I had cooked it well．It smelled very delicious．My parents were glad to see it and were moved by my action．（高分句型二）They say I will become a good boy again．（这一段主要列举事例，来介绍自己的改变，并且感动了我的父母．）

点评 本题是考查书面表达能力，在平时的学习中要加强写的训练，写作时要做到字迹工整，卷面整洁，语言流畅要把文中的要点写全，做到语句通顺，过渡自然连贯