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11．随着手机功能日益增多，越来越多的年轻人沉迷于手机娱乐活动，成为"手机控"一族．假定你是某校学生，请根据以下提示写一篇短文，向某英文报社投稿，谈谈你对该现象的看法和建议．

"手机控"的表现	沉迷于手机娱乐活动（聊天、看电影等），与朋友和家人的交流减少，离开手机会有焦虑症等异常情绪表现…
"手机控"的危害	对健康不利，影响学习…
你的建议	…

参考词汇：手机控a phone freak焦虑anxious（adj．）沉迷于be addicted to …
注意：1．内容须包括所提示信息，可适当发挥；
2．文中不得出现自己的真实姓名和学校名称；
3.90个单词左右．开头已经给出，不计入总次数．
Today，many people，especially young people，are phone freaks．They …
                                                     

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是向某英文报社投稿，谈谈你对"手机控"的看法和建议．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1"手机控"的表现：沉迷于手机娱乐活动（聊天、看电影等），与朋友和家人的交流减少，离开手机会有焦虑症等异常情绪表现…
2"手机控"的危害：对健康不利，影响学习…
3 你的建议
常用到的重点短语：
spend+时间+doing sth 花时间做某事
communicate with sb 与某人交流
be good for 对…有益
do harm to 对…不利
focus on专注于
pay attention to 关注

【高分句型】
1．①Besides，②focusing on mobile phone entertainment can affect students'study．
①besides 另外
②动名词短语做主语．focus on专注于．
2．①If they fill their time this way，they won't have too much spare time ②to think about phone entertainment
①if 引导的条件状语从句，遵循主将从现的规则．
②动词不定式做目的状语．

解答 Today many people，especially young people，are phone freaks．They spend a lot of time playing games，seeing movies，or reading novels on their smart phone，and thus communicate with their family and friends less．Without phone in hand，they will feel anxious and don't know what to do．（"手机控"的表现）As we know，too long screen time is not good for health．It does great harm to our neck and eyes．Besides，focusing on mobile phone entertainment can affect students'study【高分句型】．（"手机控"的危害）I think young people should spend more time doing sports or being with their family and friends．They should also pay more attention to their studies．If they fill their time this way，they won't have too much spare time to think about phone entertainment．【高分句型】（我的建议）

点评 本题是一篇图表作文，图表作为书面表达的一种信息提示方式，比提纲作文线索显得更简洁明了，写作时也容易区分表达，本题在写作时，要特别注意几种情况的描述，不能逐句翻译，同时要根据提示有效灵活的构思，恰当使用逻辑词语，让文章显得有条理，不杂乱