Question

请以how I change为题，写一篇80词左右的短文，描述你读初中两年来的变化。写作要点包括外貌，兴趣爱好，行为习惯等方面。

注意：1. 短文开头已写好，不计入总词数。

2. 短文必须包括所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。

 

Answer 1

My life has changed a lot in the past two years. I was fat and short when I came to the middle school. At that time I was interested in computer games and I spent most of time on it. I often stayed up and got up late. My parents were worried about me.

With the teachers’ help, I like sports now and I often play football with my classmates after school. So I become taller and stronger than before. I have a few close friends and we all like reading, too. So I usually go to the library to read some interesting books together with them. I go to bed and get up early now. My parents feel glad to see these. I’m sure I’ll be better and better.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇短文要求我们以how I change为题写一篇作文，即我是怎样变化的。在题目中给了我们这篇短文的主要内容。一是外貌方面的改变。二是兴趣爱好方面的改变。最后是行为习惯等方面的变化等。主要内容虽然已经列好，但是还需要我们自己去充实，让它变得完整、合理，内容丰富，这就需要花费我们的想象力，以及我们平时积累的知识。另外，写作时，还需注意语句间的衔接，使文意连贯，表达流畅。

【亮点说明】这是一篇比较不错的作文。作者从外貌，兴趣爱好，行为习惯等三个方面，讲述了自己这两年来的变化，层次非常的清晰。短文中需要作者自己补充的内容完成得也不错。如My parents were worried about me.等。这些内容都比较贴合文章的需要，意思也很连贯。文章中还用了一些比较好的句型，如With the teachers’ help, I like sports now and I often play football with my classmates after school.等。

考点：提纲类作文。