Question

【题目】假如你是James,以My Family为题写一篇小短文，其中需说明James与其他人物的关系，词数不少于50个。

Father: Tom doctor 39 Mother: Mary teacher 37 Sister: Alice student 6

Answer 1

【答案】

My Family

My name is James. This is my family. There are 4 people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my sister and I. My father is a doctor. He is 39 years old. He works in a hospital near my house. My mother is a teacher. She is 37 years old. She teaches math in a middle school. My sister's name is Alice. She is a primary school student. She is only 6 years old. My parents love me and my sister. I love my family very much.

【解析】

本题目的写作要点是说清楚詹姆斯一家人之间的相互关系。詹姆斯家共有4口人。爸爸妈妈和他的妹妹爱丽丝。写作时要从身份，年龄，职业这三个方面来写。这是必写的要点。另外，也可顺理成章的增加一些别的句子，来增强全文的流畅度和可读性。

【亮点说明】

本文的写作层次分明，按照要点的类别来组织句子。每个家庭成员自成一个体系。从身份，职业，年龄三个角度分别阐述清楚。另外，文章之首还做了一些铺垫，说明詹姆斯的家庭共有多少人，都是哪些成员。短文最后表述了詹姆斯的家庭成员之间互相关爱，家庭非常幸福。整篇短文读起来非常流畅，是一篇上好的范文佳作。