Question

第三节  书面表达（满分30分）

       假定你是李华。你们学校和一所美国中学签署了教师交流协议。在过去的一年里，你们的英文老师是来自这所中学的Sue Wood。不久前她返回美国任教。请你根据写作要点和要求给Sue写封电子邮件。

       写作要点：

       1.对她表达感谢之意;                       

2.介绍她离开后你自己及班里发生的事情;

       3.希望了解她的近况。                     

       要求：

       1.短文须写在答题卡的指定区域。          

2.短文词数不少于100（不含已写好的部分）。

       3.内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯。       

4.书写须清晰、工整。

       5.邮件中不能体现本人真实信息。

       Dear Sure,

       I’m Li Hua, one of your students in China. _______________________________________

______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

All the best

       Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：

       Dear Sure,

       I’m Li Hua, one of your students in China. It’s almost a month since you left us. We all miss you and are very grateful for what you did for us.

       We are busy as usual. We had an English speech contest the other day. I won the first prize! This again reminds me of all your kind help. Do you still remember the trees we planted together on the hill behind the school? Yesterday, we went there and watered them. The tree you planted yourself is growing well, and the whole class decided to name it Sue Wood. Will you come back to see Sue Wood?

       How is everything with you lately? We hope to know more about you and your American students. Hope to keep in close touch.

       All the best

       Li Hua

解析:

【思路点拨】试题为应用文中的书信写作，试题给出了写作要点，特别是具体的写作细节，为命题性写作。写好此文，需注意三点：一是写信格式要准确，信的开头已经给出，但切记要写好信的结尾。二是要详略得当，如介绍她离开后你自己班里发生的事情，考生最有话可说，但切忌长篇大论，只需作简要的介绍即可。三是切忌照译，要适当地增加细节，恰当地使用连接过渡词，以使行文连贯。

【范文点评】

文章要点齐全，写作层次清楚，能紧扣要点适当地增加细节，例如“We all miss you and are very grateful for what you did for us.”，从而使行为连贯。在表达句式上，注意了句式结构的多变，有简单句，并列句和复合句，有陈述句还有疑问句，还用到了较为复杂的定语从句，如The tree you planted yourself is growing well and the whole class decided to name it Sue Wood；同时还注重了一些优美词汇的使用，如“remind …of…”，“keep in close touch”等，从而显示出较强的语言运用能力。