Question

【题目】 上个月，你和你班的一些同学对市空气质量进行了一项调查。调查的内容如下：

写作内容：

空气质量：污染严重，特别是上下班的高峰期，情况更加糟糕。

原因分析：1. 私家车太多，近三年来以10%的速度增加；

2. 路面窄，车流速度慢，因为产生大量的尾气；

3. 道路附近的工厂排放的废气也是空气污染的原因之一。

呼 吁： 政府有责任控制私家车的数量；大力发展公共交通；市民踩单车上下班

注意：1．词数100-120左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇： rush hours 上下班高峰期

Answer 1

【答案】

Last month some of my classmates and I carried out a survey about the air quality in our city, which shows that air pollution is rather serious, especially during rush hours. Too many private cars, which have been increasing by 10 % in the last three years should be one of the main reasons. Meanwhile, all the vehicles move very slowly on the narrow roads, causing large quantities of dirty air. Furthermore, industrial waste gas released from the nearby factories also contributes to the air pollution. Therefore, it is demanded that the government take up its responsibility to restrict the number of private cars and develop public transportation.

【解析】

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