Question

假设你是李华，你刚参加了某培训学校组织的“英语夏令营”活动，请根据以下内容， 写一封投诉信。

【写作内容】

 

原来期望	提高英语成绩
存 在 问 题	1	一个班60多人，练习机会少
2	内容简单，话题陈旧，枯燥乏味
3	无午餐供应，到最近的饭店吃饭要步行30分钟
4	仅组织了一次羽毛球比赛，与广告宣传不符
描述你参加该活动后的心情和提出你的赔偿要求

 

【写作要求】

请用5个句子表达全部内容（信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总句数）。

【评分标准】

句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。

Dear Sir/Madam,

I have just returned from the English Summer Camp at your School of Language, and I’m writing to express my unhappiness with your program.

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Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

A possible version:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I have just returned from the English Summer Camp at your School of Language, and I’m writing to express my unhappiness with your program.

I took part in the program in order to improve my English but to my disappointment, there were too many students in a class, in which case students were not able to practise a lot. Moreover, the course was simple and the topics were not fresh enough so that students’ interest in English could not be aroused. Worse still, no lunch was provided and therefore I had to go to the nearest restaurant, which was 30 minutes away. It was once said in your ad that students could be provided with many chances to enjoy social practice but badminton was the only activity organized. You can imagine how upset I am to have wasted my time and money and please give half of my money back, or I shall be forced to take the matter further.

Yours,

Li Hua

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【解析】

试题分析：考生首先要仔细审题，包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，这是提纲作文，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要多使用复杂句，一句话中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：I took part in the program in order to improve my English but to my disappointment, there were too many students in a class, in which case students were not able to practise a lot.就包含了几个要点内容。

考点：提纲作文。

点评：作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合作文要求，句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。文中使用一些极佳的词语和句子为文章增色，使用高级词汇及句型。