Question

19．假设你是李华，伦敦奥组委在全球中学生中招募志愿者．你申请参加，希望高中毕业后能得到实践锻炼．请根据以下要点给组委会负责人Mr．Steven写封电子邮件：
1．自我介绍；
2．陈述参加的目的 （提供服务、交友、提高语言水平）．
注意：1．词数：120-150；
2．可适当增加细节，使行文连贯．
Dear Mr．Steven，
I'm Li Hua from China and I'm writing to you to apply for the job as a volunteer for the coming London Olympic Games．
I'm a friendly and helpful boy/girl，and I'm active in taking part in volunteer activities．There will be less language difficulty for me because English is my favorite subject and I'm quite good at it．What's more．I'll graduate from senior high this summer and I'll have proper time to work for the Olympics．
I'm crazy about sports and if I can get the opportunity，I'll try my best to serve for the Olympics．On the other side．I'm sure that I can benefit a lot from the volunteering job，such as making new friends，improving my communication skills and my oral English level．I'would appreciate it very much if I could be given the chance．
l'm looking forward to your early reply!
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文讲述的是李华要成为志愿者所写的申请书．属于半开放性作文，使用的时态以一般现在时为主，使用第一人称．在自我介绍的时候，考生可以用自己或者身边一个有显著特点的人作为原型．在写作时，要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭．同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides，further，last but not least等
【亮点说明】本文中的高级句式使用较好，如I would appreciate it very much if I could be given the chance．中的I would appreciate it…．；词汇的运用也很到位：apply for，look forward to等等；关联词的使用很合理如：What's more，On the other side．等等．

解答 Dear Mr．Steven，
I'm Li Hua from China and I'm writing to you to apply for the job as a volunteer for the coming London Olympic Games．（高分句型）
I'm a friendly and helpful boy/girl，and I'm active in taking part in volunteer activities．There will be less language difficulty for me because English is my favorite subject and I'm quite good at it．What's more．I'll graduate from senior high this summer and I'll have proper time to work for the Olympics．（高分句型）
I'm crazy about sports and if I can get the opportunity，I'll try my best to serve for the Olympics．On the other side．I'm sure that I can benefit a lot from the volunteering job，such as making new friends，improving my communication skills and my oral English level．（高分句型） I'would appreciate it very much if I could be given the chance．（高分句型）
l'm looking forward to your early reply!
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．