Question

【题目】最近一段时间我国多个地方出现雾霾天气，极大地影响了人们的健康与生活。因此你想以此为话题，写一篇通讯稿。应包括以下要点：

1. 对生活造成的影响；

2. 建议采取的措施

要求：1. 词数 100 - 120；

2. 开头已给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：雾霾haze 雾霾天气hazy weather

Recently hazy weather has occurred in many areas of China.________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

Recently hazy weather has occurred in many areas of China, which has great harm to our daily life. And it has become a growing concern throughout the country.

It’s obvious that hazy weather has many negative effects. First of all, people’s health is threatened and some of them even suffer from diseases such as coughing. In addition, more traffic jams and more accidents arise from it, which in turn disturbs people’s normal life.

Faced with this situation, we are supposed to raise the awareness of environmental protection. Not only should we stop sending out harmful gases, but more energy should be saved in our daily life. Meanwhile, importance should be attached to planting trees. Only when we take effective measures, will our environment make a difference.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是提纲类作文，要点已给出。写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。

【亮点说明】这是一篇通讯稿，采用三段式，语言简练，结构分明，布局合理，运用高级句子。Recently hazy weather has occurred in many areas of China, which has great harm to our daily life.使用非限制性定语从句；It’s obvious that hazy weather has many negative effects.it作形式主语，真正的主语是后面that引导的主语从句；Faced with this situation, we are supposed to raise the awareness of environmental protection.过去分词作状语；Not only should we stop sending out harmful gases, but more energy should be saved in our daily life.句中运用了部分倒装；Only when we take effective measures, will our environment make a difference. Only位于状语从句的开头，主句用部分倒装堪称经典；另外句中使用First of all, In addition, Meanwhile,为文章增色添彩。