Question

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。

文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除

或修改。

增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在其下面写出该加的词。

删除：把多余的词用斜线〔\〕划掉。

修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。

注意：1.每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；

2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。

One day, my whole family went to climb the big hill. My father and mother told my elder

sister and I that the first one to get to the top of the hill would be give a toy. Hear this, we

began to run up. At first I kept ahead, but a few minute later my sister was ahead me.

However, I didn’t give up. I reached the top firstly in the end. We enjoy the beautiful

scenery and had a picnic on the top of the hill. I was the most happiest one all the time,

because I not only won a toy and also learnt that one shouldn’t give up easily.

 

Answer 1

【答案】

One day, my whole family went to climb the big hill. My father and mother told my elder

a

sister and I that the first one to get to the top of the hill would be give a toy. Hear this, we

me                                          given     Hearing

began to run up. At first I kept ahead, but a few minute later my sister was ahead∧ me.

                                               minutes                   of

However, I didn’t give up. I reached the top firstly in the end. We enjoy the beautiful

                                               first             enjoyed

scenery and had a picnic on the top of the hill. I was the most happiest one all the time,

because I not only won a toy and also learnt that one shouldn’t give up easily.

                             but

【解析】

 此处是初次提高，用不定冠词表泛指。

 I改为me，与my elder a sister一起充当told的宾语。

 give改为given，此处要用被动语态。

 hear改为hearing，现在分词作状语。

 a few后要接名词复数。

 ahead of在……前面

 文章叙述的是过去的事，改为enjoyed。

 没有firstly这种形式，要改为first。

 most 与后面的happiest都是最高级，重复。

 与前面的not only搭配。