Question

14．在你18岁生日到来之际，你父亲准备送你一件礼物，并让你做出自己的选择．你会选择哪份礼物，阐述你选择这份礼物的理由．
1．iphone 7s    2．A trip to London      3．An experience as a volunteer
An experience as a volunteer
With my 18th birthday drawing near，my father promises me that I can choose a gift for my birthday．（高分句型一）After a thoughtful considersation，I choose an experience as av olunteer as my gift．
I plan to work as a volunteer at a nursing home on my birthday．As a volunteer，I will clean the room for the old people in the morning．What's more，I will read articles for them，which will help them learn whatis going on at home and abroad．（高分句型二）Most of the old peopleare weak，so Iwill take them to take exercise．I am sure The old people there will be satisfied with my work．As far as I am concerned，I can bring joy to other people as a volunteer．It will make me a more caring person．In a word，my work as a volunteer will be extremely rewarding and I will have a meaningful and unforgettable birthday!（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于开放类作文，根据提示信息在你18岁生日到来之际，你父亲准备送你一件礼物，并让你做出自己的选择．你会选择哪份礼物，阐述你选择这份礼物的理由，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，2、要在合理的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：thoughtful considersation深思熟虑；plan to计划做…；What's more而且；be satisfied with 对…满意；As far as I am concerned以我的观点来看；In a word总之
With my 18th birthday drawing near，my father promises me that I can choose a gift for my birthday．（高分句型一）
What's more，I will read articles for them，which will help them learn what is going on at home and abroad．（高分句型二）
In a word，my work as a volunteer will be extremely rewarding and I will have a meaningful and unforgettable birthday!（高分句型三）

解答 An experience as a volunteer
       With my 18th birthday drawing near，my father promises me that I can choose a gift for my birthday．（高分句型一）After a thoughtful considersation，I choose an experience as a volunteer as my gift．
       I plan to work as a volunteer at a nursing home on my birthday．As a volunteer，I will clean the room for the old people in the morning．What's more，I will read articles for them，which will help them learn what is going on at home and abroad．（高分句型二）Most of the old people are weak，so I will take them to take exercise．I am sure The old people there will be satisfied with my work．
      As far as I am concerned，I can bring joy to other people as a volunteer．It will make me a more caring person．In a word，my work as a volunteer will be extremely rewarding and I will have a meaningful and unforgettable birthday!（高分句型三）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．