Question

14．假设你是刘海，你的加拿大朋友Kate来信询问你的学习情况，请你根据以下提供的信息，写一封100字左右的回信，谈谈自从你进入高一年级以来，尝试新的学习方法，你的学习情况的变化．信的格式已提供给你．
过去：被动学习，课堂上忙于做笔记，课余做作业，无时间消化．
现在：自主学习，小组讨论，课外活动多，成绩优异．
Dear Kate，
       ．
Yours，
Liu Hai．

Answer 1

分析 本文是提纲类作文，要求写信给Peter，介绍自从你校实行新课改以来，尝试新的学习方法，你们学习情况的变化，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，而且很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏．在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次．同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅．本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁的表达自己的观点．
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，使用常用的短语：To our delight，使我们高兴的是，late into the night．到深夜，in pairs 成对的，go in for参加，还有范文充分体现高中教材中的重点语法和句式：There are many things going on in our school．这句话用了现在分词做定语，In the past，our teachers stood in front of the class talking all the time while we students listened，busily taking notes．这句话用了while表示对比，和现在分词，After a tiring day at school，we always had a lot of homework to do．这句话用了不定式．

解答 Dear Peter，
I'm glad to hear from you again．There are many things going on in our school．To our delight，things have got much better since we started a different way of learning．
（高分句型）In the past，our teachers stood in front of the class talking all the time while we students listened，busily taking notes．（高分句型）After a tiring day at school，we always had a lot of homework to do．Sometimes we even worked late into the night．Now we are active in class．We often have discussions in pairs or in groups．After class，we enjoy all kinds of activities，such as going in for sports，doing experiments，or surfing the Internet．（高分句型）
We are extremely happy about the changes in our studies．
All the best
Yours Li Hua

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．