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9．Designed by our monitor，we has a story telling contest at the class meeting．All of us were very active，and everybody said that the most touching story was the one told by Zhang Hua，which won the first prize and made the meeting more meaningful So，here，I would like to share：
Not long ago，my friends encouraged me to try a 150-mile ride trip，an annual event that raised money for the poor children in the far-away mountains．
When I registered，the idea seemed excellent-to support a worthy cause while riding for a long distance．The ride began in the morning，and for the first few hours，I felt wonderful．But by the end of the day，I felt tired and bored．
Every excuse my brain pushed out seemed to travel right down to my legs．"I can't handle this，"and"everyone else is a better rider"were translated into shortness of breath．I was sure I'd have to quit．
Then I noticed that the lone rider in front of me looked different in some way．But she was too far away for me to tell why．So I pushed my self to catch up．There she was，riding alone slowly but steadily，with a slight and determined smile on her face-and she has only one leg．
My focus changed at that moment，For a whole day I'd been doubting my body，but now I knew it was the will that would help me reach my goal．
[写作内容]
1）以约30个词概括以上博文的主要内容．
2）以约120个词就"班会课"发表你的看法，内容包括：
①为什么张华的故事让此次班会课令人难忘？
②举例说明班会课对你学习和成长的影响；
③你怎样看待班会课对学生的影响．
[写作要求]
1）在作文中可以使用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不能直接引用文中的内容．
2）作文中不能出现真实的姓名和学校的名称．
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．
At a class meeting，Zhang Hua won the 1^st prize in a story telling contest，which was so touching that the writer noted it down to share in his blog．
In his story，he experienced a volunteer ride trip to raise money for poor children．He had thought it was as easy as a cake，but then，tired and bored，he had a thousand reasons to give up when he noticed a one-legged lady before him．Seeing her determined smile，Zhang Hua reached his goal．What a great story and class meeting!It is inspiring us how to face difficulties in our life．
Once I was addicted to computer games，and I was so involved in it that it influenced my school work terribly．Then at a class meeting，my head teacher organized many activities to let us know the bad effects of being addictive．I was shocked and realized my danger!If it had not been because of that valuable class meeting，I would have been another person．
So，class meetings are our expectations，because they are an effective form of school moral education and the important way to convert the students'thought．Therefore，a good head teacher often attaches great importance to a weekly class meeting．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：win the first prize（赢得第一名），in a contest（在比赛中），note sth down（写下；记下），experience sth（鼓励某人做某事），raise money（筹集资金），as easy as a cake （容易的事），give up（放弃），reached one's goal（实现某人的目标），face difficulties（面对困难），be addicted to（尽最大努力做），be involved in（涉及，卷入），influence sth（影响某物），convert one's thought（改变某人的想法），attach great importance to sth （认为某物重要）．
【高分句型一】
1．At a class meeting，Zhang Hua won the 1^st prize in a story telling contest，which was so touching that the writer noted it down to share in his blog．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，关系代词"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
【高分句型二】
2．Seeing her determined smile，Zhang Hua reached his goal．
此处是由现在分词短语作伴随状语，主句为"Zhang Hua reached his goal"，主句的主语为"Zhang Hua"与动词"see"构成逻辑上的主动关系．
【高分句型三】
3．If it had not been because of that valuable class meeting，I would have been another person．
此处是虚拟语气在if条件状语从句中的用法，是与过去的事实相反，从句结构为"had+过去分词"．
 主句结构为"would/could/should/might+have done"．

解答 At a class meeting，Zhang Hua won the 1^st prize in a story telling contest，which was so touching that the writer noted it down to share in his blog．【高分句型一】（概括）
In his story，he experienced a volunteer ride trip to raise money for poor children．He had thought it was as easy as a cake，but then，tired and bored，he had a thousand reasons to give up when he noticed a one-legged lady before him．Seeing her determined smile，Zhang Hua reached his goal．【高分句型二】What a great story and class meeting!It is inspiring us how to face difficulties in our life．（为什么张华的故事让此次班会课令人难忘）
             Once I was addicted to computer games，and I was so involved in it that it influenced my school work terribly．Then at a class meeting，my head teacher organized many activities to let us know the bad effects of being addictive．I was shocked and realized my danger!If it had not been because of that valuable class meeting，I would have been another person．【高分句型三】（举例说明班会课对你学习和成长的影响）
             So，class meetings are our expectations，because they are an effective form of school moral education and the important way to convert the students'thought．Therefore，a good head teacher often attaches great importance to a weekly class meeting．（个人观点：怎样看待班会课对学生的影响）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．