Question

7．阅读下面材料，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文．
On the morning after the rainstorm，a man was walking on the beach，enjoying the beautiful view of the nature．Suddenly，he found thousands of starfish（海星） trapped in the shallow puddles（水坑） on the beach．As the sun rose，the water in the puddles was disappearing and the starfish began to struggle for life desperately．However，they still had no hopes to go back to the sea not far away．
As the man continued walking，he noticed a little boy picking up the starfish one by one and throwing them into the ocean．Then he went over and asked the boy，"What are you doing？"The boy replied，"I'm throwing starfish back into the water．If I leave them here，they'll dry up and die．"The man said，"But look how many starfish there are．What you're doing can't possibly make a great difference to all of them．"As the boy picked up another starfish and threw it into the ocean，he said，"Well，it makes a difference to this one!"Then he added，"Though I can't save all of them，I can make some of them survive with my efforts．"
Moved by the lovely and warm-hearted boy，the man bent down to pick up the struggling starfish and threw them into water．Every time he threw the starfish into the water，he felt their fate was changing．
1、以约30个词概括短文的内容要点．
2、然后以约120个词就"施助于人"的主题发表看法，内容包括：
（1）你如何评价故事中小男孩？
（2）叙述一次你真实或虚构的"施助于人"的经历．
（3）呼吁大家积极参与"施助于人"的活动．
1、作文中可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2、作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．
A man noticed a boy repeatedly picking up the trapped starfish and throwing them into the sea despite being unable to save all of them．Consequently，the man was moved and joined the boy to save the struggling starfish．
Reading the impressive story，I find the boy was so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise from all the people．Young as he was，he fulfilled what was incredible to people．Actually，the young boy set a good example，especially to the young．
My meaningful experience of offering help to a schoolmate will never escape from my memory．When I was in Senior Two，one of my schoolmates suffered from a severe and rare disease，which cost his parents all their savings and even put them heavily into debt．For lack of money，he was unable to get further medical treatment．Knowing this，I together with my classmates called for all the students and friends to collect money for him．It was our timely efforts that helped him out of hardships．Eventually he was saved．
As the saying goes，"A small act of kindness goes a long way．"Therefore，I appeal to all the people to get involved in the campaign of offering a hand to others．I think only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：pick up （捡起），deserve praise（值得表扬），set a good example（树立榜样），offer help to sb（给某人提供帮助），escape from（逃离，逃避），suffer from （遭受…），cost sb sth（花费某人某事），put sb heavily into debt…（使某人陷入债务），for lack of （由于缺乏…），together with （与…一起），call for（要求，需要…），collect money（筹集资金），a harmonious society （一个和谐社会），help sb out of （帮某人摆脱…），appeal to（呼吁），get involved in（牵连，涉及，牵扯到…）．
【高分句型一】
1．Reading the impressive story，I find the boy was so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise from all the people．
此处是由现在分词短语"Reading the impressive story"作时间状语，主句为"I find the boy was so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise from all the people"，主句的主语"I"与动词"read"存在逻辑上的主动关系．
【高分句型二】
1．Young as he was，he fulfilled what was incredible to people．
此处是"as"表"尽管"时构成部分倒装句型，结构为"形容词+as/though+主语+谓语"．
【高分句型三】
2．one of my schoolmates suffered from a severe and rare disease，which cost his parents all their savings and even put them heavily into debt．
此处是关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
【高分句型四】
3．I think only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society．
此处是宾语从句中部分倒装结构，结构为"Only+【状语成分：介词短语/when、if引导的从句/时间副词】+一般疑问句形式"．

解答 A man noticed a boy repeatedly picking up the trapped starfish and throwing them into the sea despite being unable to save all of them．Consequently，the man was moved and joined the boy to save the struggling starfish．（概括）
Reading the impressive story，I find the boy was so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise from all the people．【高分句型一】Young as he was，he fulfilled what was incredible to people．【高分句型二】Actually，the young boy set a good example，especially to the young．（评价故事中小男孩）
My meaningful experience of offering help to a schoolmate will never escape from my memory．When I was in Senior Two，one of my schoolmates suffered from a severe and rare disease，which cost his parents all their savings and even put them heavily into debt．【高分句型三】For lack of money，he was unable to get further medical treatment．Knowing this，I together with my classmates called for all the students and friends to collect money for him．It was our timely efforts that helped him out of hardships．Eventually he was saved．（一次"施助于人"的经历）
As the saying goes，"A small act of kindness goes a long way．"Therefore，I appeal to all the people to get involved in the campaign of offering a hand to others．I think only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society．【高分句型四】（个人观点：呼吁大家积极参与"施助于人"的活动）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．