题目内容
【题目】假如你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国笔友Chris在给你邮件中提到他最近在准备SAT考试(美国高考),心理压力很大,很苦恼,希望得到你的帮助。请你给他回信,内容包括:
1.安慰对方;
2.分析心理压力过大会导致的后果;
3.给出相应的建议及其理由。
注意:词数不少于100。
Dear Chris,
_______________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Chris,
I’m sorry to learn that you’ve been under a lot of pressure lately due to the upcoming SAT test. Anyone in your situation would suffer a certain amount of stress. But don’t worry too much, or you may find yourself problems with sleep, appetite, or even memory. Here are some ways I think that can deal with stress.
The first thing you can try is to exercise. Exercises like walking or running not only boost energy but also build confidence. Another way is to enjoy some games with friends, which can take your mind off the stress and make you more relaxed. It might also be a good idea to talk to someone who is a good listener; having someone to listen to your problems can make you feel better.
I believe it will all work out. Cheer up! Let me know if I can help further.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文。你的美国笔友由于备考压力过大,苦恼的他希望得到你的帮助,对此,需要给他回一封信。
信的称谓已经给出,第一段首先要安慰朋友,不要让他过于焦虑,并告诉他压力过大导致的后果。第二段给出一些具体的减轻压力的方法,以及这样做的理由。最后一段是鼓励朋友的话。
文章内容要点已经给出。但考生在写这篇文章时,要注意以下几点:
1. 这封信主要是向压力过大的朋友提供帮助,所以以一般现在时为主。
2. 要点要齐全。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词,使上下文行文流畅,衔接自然流畅。
3. 注意文章的结构要清晰,细节把控要到位。给出的建议要附带上相应的理由,否则会显得说服力不够,内容不够丰满。此外,要注意信件的写作格式。
【范文亮点】
优秀词汇和短语:upcoming即将到来的,suffer遭受,appetite食欲,deal with处理,boost energy增强精力,build confidence建立信心,take your mind off思想放空,cheer up振奋起来
优秀句式和行文脉络:
1.Another way is to enjoy some games with friends, which can take your mind off the stress and make you more relaxed另外一个方法是和朋友一起享受游戏,这可以帮你减轻思想上的压力,让你更加放松。(运用了to do 不定式作表语,运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句)
2.全文运用了The first thing,Another way,also这些连接词使行文流畅。而且全文结构清晰,最后还写了振奋朋友精神的话,作为一封给朋友提供帮助的信件,这些细节处理的很好。