Question

近年来，高中生在校外租房子的现象比较普遍，请结合以下要点谈谈自己的观点。

赞同：	1. 自由，无纪律约束；
2. 有更多的隐私权。
反对：	1. 寝室有时虽然有点吵，但方便；
2. 能培养交际能力；
3. 能了解生活的价值，培养独立能力。
自己的观点：	……

注意：1. 词数120左右；

2．文章的开头已经给出，不计入总词数；

3．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

4. 参考词汇：寝室：dormitory;  隐私权：privacy

In recent years, it’s common for high school students to rent houses outside. Different students have different opinions.

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

In recent years, it’s common for high school students to rent houses outside. Different students have different opinions.

Some students think that they prefer to live outside alone. Apart from the freedom of the school rules, they can do whatever they like, such as staying up late, reading books or even surfing the Internet. What’s more, it can give them more privacy.

Others hold an opposite view that it’s not worthwhile tenting house outside. Despite the fact that sometimes it’s noisy to live in dormitories, it actually bring much convenience. Living in school can make us develop the ability of how to communicate with others. In addition, we can also learn the value of life, thus building up self-independence.

As far as I’m concerned, we students should treasure the opportunity to spend the rest time together in school.

【解析】

试题分析：作文是常见的材料作文，要求写一篇关于高中生在外租房子的作文。材料以表格的形式呈现，清晰明了，学生容易构思。作文可以分三部分来写，即赞同者的观点；反对者的观点和自己的观点。写作时，要包含所有要点，给出的词汇必须用上；注意短语段之间的连贯，不能生搬硬套，逐句翻译。尽量使用高级词汇和重点词汇，时态、句型等语法知识要正确，语言要得体。另外，拼写和标点不容小觑，避免拼错和标点用错，给阅卷老师留下不好的印象。

【亮点说明】范文分别介绍了赞同者、反对者和自己的观点，作文结构比较明确。范文使用了such as, What’s more, In addition, thus, As far as I’m concerned等连接上下句和前后文，使作文比较连贯，衔接紧密。范文运用短语prefer to, Apart from, how to do sth, communicate with等，使作文内容充实。范文使用了宾语从句think that they prefer to live outside alone, they can do whatever they like和同位语从句hold an opposite view that it’s..., Despite the fact that sometimes it’s...an opposite view that和固定句型be worthwhile doing，和非谓语动词Living in school can...等，显示了对语法知识的灵活运用能力。

考点：材料类作文