Question

书面表达（满分25分）
假设你是高中生李华。最近，学生吃零食现象、体育活动后喝各种饮料来解渴非常普遍。请你就这一现象写一封信，向校长反映这些问题，希望遏制这种情况。字数120字左右。
要求：1. 如实反映这些情况。
2. 表明由此引发的问题。
3. 提出你的建议。
注意：信的开头、落款及信的第一句已给出（不计词数）。
参考词汇：零食 snacks
Dear Headmaster,
I’m writing to tell you about some problems happening on campus.
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Headmaster,
I’m writing to tell you about some problems happening on campus. It is common that students are accustomed to having snacks and a variety of drinks after having sports.
I’m worried that if students are addicted to snacks and drinks, it will do great harm to their health, for they are developing both in body and mind. So they need to take in all kinds of nutritions. However, sancks and drinks can’t meet their needs to grow up normally. On the other hand, it is easy for students to get into a bad habit of spending money in buying such kind of things, which is a waste of money.
In my opinion, students should have regular meals. Meanwhile, we can eat fruits and drink milk to make sure that we can develop healthily.
Thank you for your consideration.
Lihua

解析试题分析：考查应用文中的书信的写作。要求向向校长反映学生吃零食现象、体育活动后喝各种饮料来解渴的情况。希望遏制这种情况。要点都已经给出，信件要点包括：情况，问题，和你的建议，要求在提纲的基础上进行拓展，丰富文章内容，审题时注意本文使用一般现在时，描述要尽量选择简洁的语言，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用高级词汇和固定短语准确表述。象范文的it is easy for students to get into a bad habit of spending money in buying such kind of things, which is a waste of money.使用了it句型和非限制性定语从句,还要用适当的连接词被句子连接起来，象however, On the other hand,等词，这样文章显得更连贯。
考点：考查书信类短文写作。
点评：书信类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。