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13．据最新一项调查发现，"低头族"正以星火燎原之势蔓延．假定你是李华，请根据以下要点提示，用英语给《二十一世纪报》编辑部写一封读者来信，以引起社会各界对此的广泛关注．
1．描述这一现象；
2．分析其原因及弊端；
3．你认为该如何改变现状．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．但可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已给出，不记入总词数．
参考词汇：低头族phubbing
Dear editor，
I'm writing to you about a common phenomenon to draw it to the public attention．
                ．
Best wishes to you!
Yours truly，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一篇短文，陈述对自己的成长起着很大影响的家庭、学校、社会、朋友、书籍、名人等诸多因素中的两个或三个及理由．
写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
写作要点：1．选择并陈述对你的成长起着很大影响的家庭、学校、社会、朋友、书籍、名人等诸多因素中的两个或三个； 2．谈谈你的看法和理由．
重要短语：write to sb（写信给某人），a common phenomenon（一个常见的现象），draw sth to the public attention （引起某人的关注），wait for （等候），be addicted to（上瘾），ignore sb （忽略某人），be used for（被用于），keep in touch with sb（与某人保持联系），be engaged in（忙于），fail to do（没能做某事），communicate with（与…交流），help sb
 with sth （帮助某人某物），care about sth（关心某事）．
【高分句型一】
1．①As is often the case，②when people are having meals，③waiting for buses or even walking along streets，they are always addicted to their phones，heads hanging down，completely ignoring others．
①此处是关系代词"as"引导的非限制性定语从句，关系代词"that"在从句中作主语，意为"正如"，主句为"they are always addicted to their phones，heads hanging down，completely ignoring others"．
②此处是时间状语从句．
③此处是由现在分词短语作伴随状语．
【高分句型二】
2．The reason for the increasing number of phubbings everywhere is that smart phones nowadays can be used for people to do nearly everything，such as playing mobile games，shopping online and keeping in touch with friends through QQ．
此处是由连接词"that"引导的表语从句，结构为"The reason for sth is that+从句"，意为"某事的原因是…"．
【高分句型三】
3．Moreover，people engaged in phones fail to communicate well with those around them．
此处是由"过去分词短语"作名词"people"的后置定语，可以理解为"people who are engaged in phones fail to communicate well with those around them"，句子的谓语动词为"fail to communicate well with"，宾语为"those around them"．

解答 Dear editor，
     I'm writing to you about a common phenomenon to draw it to the public attention．（目的）
 As is often the case，when people are having meals，waiting for buses or even walking along streets，they are always addicted to their phones，heads hanging down，completely ignoring others．【高分句型一】（描述现象）
The reason for the increasing number of phubbings everywhere is that smart phones nowadays can be used for people to do nearly everything，such as playing mobile games，shopping online and keeping in touch with friends through QQ．【高分句型二】However，too much exposure to phones is harmful for their health and safety．Moreover，people engaged in phones fail to communicate well with those around them．【高分句型三】（分析其原因及弊端）
Personally，people should wisely use their phones to help with their work and study．Meanwhile they'd better care more about their family and friends rather than phones．（如何改变现状）
Best wishes to you!
Yours truly，
Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．