Question

10．近来中学生的个人安全问题日益受到社会的广泛关注，很多中学生缺乏自我保护的意识．请你用英语就此话题写一篇短文，并对周围的同学提出自我保护的建议．
要点：1、分析导致中学生安全问题的原因；
      2、中学生自我保护的重要性；
      3、你是如何进行自我保护的；
      4、你对同学们的建议．
注意：词数 120左右．

Answer 1

分析 本文是根据所给要点内容写一篇关于中学生如何进行自我保护的短文，属于提纲作文．在写作时人称用第一人称和第三人称，时态用一般现在时．重要短语：be due to（由于），a lack of（缺乏），be of great significance（重要），live up to parents'expectations …（达到父母的期望），contributes to（有利于，促成），turn to sb for help（向某人求助）．

解答 Recently，it has been a great public concern that the students lack self-protection awareness，which is due to a lack of social experience among students【高分句型】（分析原因）．
Therefore learning how to protect ourselves is of great significance to us all．The importances are as follows：for one thing，security comes first．Without security，we can achieve nothing and cannot live up to parents'expectations．for another thing，protecting ourselves contributes to the healthy development of the students，which is associated with the happiness of every family．【高分句型】Meanwhile，it also helps to build a more harmonious society．（自我保护的重要性）
Now the social atmosphere is not very good on television or newspapers which often have reported that somebody was kidnapped and so on．So in daily life，I am really aware of protecting my own life safety．What I often do are the followings：First，go home on time after school，don't stay out．Second，when I go home alone at night，try to pick a bright place to go or to choose the place where there are persons．Third，if a man sneaks behind you，don't panic，just to go to public places．（如何进行自我保护）
   Personally，in order to protect us students，above all，we should strengthen our security awareness．Besides，when accidents occur，we should calm down and turn to teachers or parents for help．The government also plays a leading role in protecting students．In a word，only by the combined efforts of every side involved can we live and study in harmony．（建议）

点评 写好提纲式作文的关键是认真审题和分析所给的提纲，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来．语言力求准确、简洁．同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．最后必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等．