Question

阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Many students in the colleges and universities are found taking no notice of the waste of water, electricity or paper.

Very few students use washbasins when washing faces. Some schoolgirls do not turn off the taps when putting the facial cream on their faces, leaving the water flow away. There is a phenomenon which can often be seen in students’ public washrooms. A basin of clothes is put under a tap which is turned on at the maximum, and the water in the basin is spilling over, but there is no one in the washroom. The owner of the clothes comes back and pours out half of the water in the basin.

The same thing happens in the use of electricity in the colleges and universities. During supper time, all the lights are turned on. However, there are only several or even no students in the classroom, which can hold over a hundred students. At night, some of the dormitories are locked, but the lights are still on inside. Quite a few students explain themselves that they don’t have to pay the extra electricity cost even if they overuse it because they have paid the school fee already.

【写作内容】

1. 以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。

2. 以约120个词就“学生应增强节约能源意识”这个话题发表你的看法，内容要点包括：

(1) 学生增强节约能源意识的必要性；

(2) 你认为生活中如何做到节约能源。

【写作要求】

作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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Answer 1

Lots of students in the colleges and universities pay no attention to the waste of water, electricity and paper, which causes a large amount of energy to be wasted.

The waste and overuse of energy has influenced ecological balance, which will have a harmful effect on our environment. It is necessary for us students to enhance the awareness of saving energy.

Personally, I think we can save much energy in our daily life. First, we can walk or ride bicycles to school. If schools are too far away from our homes, we can take buses instead of taking private cars or taxis. Second, we should write on both sides of paper. Besides, we can take reusable bags with us when shopping. Fourth, we can save electricity by turning off the lights or other electrical appliances when we sleep or leave the rooms. In addition, we can reuse the water after washing to clean the toilets.

In a word, as long as we make efforts, a lot of energy can be saved and the environment can be protected.

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求先用大约30个词概括短文的主要内容，再用大约120个词就“学生应增强节约能源意识”话题发表自己的看法，写作要点包括：增强节约意识的必要性；如何节约能源两个方面；可以写亲身经历，也可以虚构故事，不能直接引用短文中的句子；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观；注意行文的连贯性。

亮点说明：范文覆盖了所有要点，使用了较多的语法结构和词汇，具备较强的语言运用能力；使用了一些词汇和短语来连接上下文，使作文结构紧凑。

语法方面：定语从句①which causes a large amount of energy to be wasted，②which will have a harmful effect on our environment；现在完成时...has influenced ecological balance；固定句型It is necessary for us students to enhance the awareness of saving energy；条件句①If schools are too far away from our homes，②as long as we make effort；时间状语从句when we sleep or leave the rooms等，语法知识运用娴熟，有较扎实的语法基础；

固定短语和搭配：pay no attention to, a large amount of, have a harmful effect on, the awareness of, far away from, instead of, turn off等，使作文内容得到充实；

连接词方面：范文使用Personally, First, Second, Besides, Fourth, In addition, In a word等来衔接句子和段落，使作文衔接紧密、语意连贯。

考点：材料作文