Question

作为一名高三学生的你，明年即将毕业。现在校报征稿，请根据以下要点写一篇英语短文，谈谈你对高三生活的体会和建议。

1.  对老师与家长的关爱表示感谢；

2.  向与自己发生过矛盾的同学表达歉意；

3.  努力学习，实现人生梦想；

4.  对学弟、学妹的建议。

注意：

1.  可适当加入细节，使行文连贯；

2.  词数：100 左右（开头已给出，不计入总字数）。

High school is always considered as the most cherished period of one’ s life. As a Senior 3 student, it won’t be long before I graduate.

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

High school is always considered as the most cherished period of one’s life. As a Senior 3 student, it won’t be long before I graduate. Now, I have much to share with my fellow students.

Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation of help from those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included. Without their help and advice, my life would be different. Secondly, it's high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship. Above all, I've made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success. Just as the old saying goes, "No pains, no gains."

Finally I hope that all the younger fellows can make full use of time, because time and tide wait for no men.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类书面表达，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但是不是很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏。还要有所拓展，内容要充实，这就要求考生自己拓展发挥，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。

【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，运用了一些词组：Above all首要的是，最重要的是, made up my mind to do下决心做，make every effort to do努力做，make full use of充分利用，范文中的句式多变，运用不同的语法知识： I would like to show my appreciation of help from those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included.这句话用了现在分词做定语， it's high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship这句话用了固定句型. it's high time to do该做什么了…，ust as the old saying goes, "No pains, no gains."  time and tide wait for no men.这两句是谚语，还有范文还使用 Firstly, Secondly, Finally这样的词使文章更加连贯。

考点：考查提纲类书面表达