Question

【题目】每到放学，家长接学生的车辆总会导致校门口的交通过度拥挤，学校对此非常苦恼。假如你是高一年级的学生李华，请给校长写一封信，分析一下该现象产生的原因，并提出你的建议。

注意：120词左右；开头已给出，不计入词数。

Mr. Wang,

I’m writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate.

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Best wishes!

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Mr. Wang,

I'm writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate.

With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. Besides, some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate, without taking anything else into consideration.

In order to solve it, I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken. First, I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike. Second, if they have to be picked up by their parents by car, they'd better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places. Finally, it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times.

I hope my suggestions will be useful to help solve the problem.

Best wishes!

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本文是书信类作文，要求给校长写一封信，分析一下校园拥堵产生的原因，并提出你的建议。要注意以下几点：1、题目没有具体说明要点内容，考生就校门口的交通过度拥挤情况以及产生的这种情况的原因这两方面展开说就可以，2、在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。3、同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。4、本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。

【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组：contributes to导致，taking sth. into consideration.将…考虑在内，call on sb to do号召某人做…pick up 捡起，remind sb to do提醒某人做…。同时句型多变，如With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem.这句话用了定语从句，In order to solve it, I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken.这句话用了同位语从句，I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike.这句话用了it做形式宾语，it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times.这句话用了it做形式主语。还有范文还使用了Besides, First, Second, Finally,这样的关联词，使文章更加通顺。