Question

16．假如你是李华．你看到美国留学生Sharon 在网上发贴，希望有人能帮助她提高普通话（Mandarin）水平，她可以教英语作为回报．请根据以下提示用英语给她写一封电子邮件．
1．表达给她提供帮助的意愿； 
2．说明你能胜任辅导的理由； 
3．给出讲好普通话的两点建议；
 4．提出你学习英语的具体需求．
注意：1．词数100左右，开头语已为你写好； 
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 
3．文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；
Hi Sharon，
This is Li Hua．I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin．．

Answer 1

分析 本题为提纲类写作，根据材料所给的提示，写一封电子邮件，写作要点包括1．表达给她提供帮助的意愿； 2．说明你能胜任辅导的理由； 3．给出讲好普通话的两点建议； 4．提出你学习英语的具体需求．写作时以第一人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主要时态．
重点词汇：be interested in （对…感兴趣）；be fit for （适合）；In addition（而且，另外）；communicate with sb（与…某人交流）；spend time doing（花费时间做某事）；be sure to do （一定做某事）；be eager to do （渴望做某事）；allow sb to do sth （允许某人做某事）
高分句型：1．①Learning Mandarin takes time，so ②if you want to learn it well，you should ③spend much time practicing Mandarin in everyday．
①动名词短语作主语，谓语动词用单数形式；②if引导一个条件状语从句；③spend time doing指固定搭配，意为"花费时间做某事"．
2．As the saying goes，practice makes perfect．
运用谚语practice makes perfect（熟能生巧）增强文章的感染力．
3．Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning，by which you are sure to make great progress．
定语从句中当关系代词前面有介词时，指物时关系代词只能用which．

解答 Hi Sharon，
　　This is Li Hua．I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin．I am quite interested in it．I think I'm fit for it．As a student，I have been learning Mandarin for many years．In addition，I am Chinese，which means Mandarin is a must for me communicate with others in my daily life．So I'm quite confident that I can help you learn Mandarin．
　　Learning Mandarin takes time，so if you want to learn it well，you should spend much time practicing Mandarin in everyday（高分句型一）．As the saying goes，practice makes perfect（高分句型二）．Besides，you can also read some books in Chinese，see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programs．Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning，by which you are sure to make great progress（高分句型三）．
　　In your post，you say you can teach English as a reward．It is just what I want．I'm eager to improve my English．So，if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin，you can help me improve my English．We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese，so that we can improve our oral speaking．
　　Hope for you early reply!
Yours Sincerely
Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意要点的提炼要全，关键短语和句型要写对，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．