Question

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。
文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除
或修改。
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在其下面写出该加的词。
删除：把多余的词用斜线〔\〕划掉。
修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。
注意：1.每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；
2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。
One day, my whole family went to climb the big hill. My father and mother told my elder
sister and I that the first one to get to the top of the hill would be give a toy. Hear this, we
began to run up. At first I kept ahead, but a few minute later my sister was ahead me.
However, I didn’t give up. I reached the top firstly in the end. We enjoy the beautiful
scenery and had a picnic on the top of the hill. I was the most happiest one all the time,
because I not only won a toy and also learnt that one shouldn’t give up easily.

Answer 1

One day, my whole family went to climb the big hill. My father and mother told my elder
a
sister and I that the first one to get to the top of the hill would be give a toy. Hear this, we
me                                          given     Hearing
began to run up. At first I kept ahead, but a few minute later my sister was ahead∧ me.
minutes                   of
However, I didn’t give up. I reached the top firstly in the end. We enjoy the beautiful
first             enjoyed
scenery and had a picnic on the top of the hill. I was the most happiest one all the time,
because I not only won a toy and also learnt that one shouldn’t give up easily.
but

解析【小题1】此处是初次提高，用不定冠词表泛指。
【小题2】I改为me，与my elder a sister一起充当told的宾语。
【小题3】give改为given，此处要用被动语态。
【小题4】hear改为hearing，现在分词作状语。
【小题5】a few后要接名词复数。
【小题6】ahead of在……前面
【小题7】文章叙述的是过去的事，改为enjoyed。
【小题8】没有firstly这种形式，要改为first。
【小题9】most 与后面的happiest都是最高级，重复。
【小题10】与前面的not only搭配。