题目内容
【题目】假定你是李华,最近获悉你的美国网友Peter家乡受到地震侵袭,损失惨重。请你用英语给Peter写一封慰问信。信的内容包括:
1. 得知情况及感受;
2. 表达安慰和鼓励;
3. 打算提供的帮助。
注意:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 开头和结语已为你写好,但不计入总词数。
Dear Peter,
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Never give up hope and be strong! Longing for good news from you!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Peter,
I’m awfully sorry to hear that a horrible and severe earthquake unexpectedly hit your hometown and caused a great loss. I am writing to express my deepest sympathy for you.
You must feel sorrowful now. However, life isn’t so bad. As long as you remain optimistic, you will get through this difficult period. As a strong-willed man, you will definitely gather all your courage to face and handle the mess that the earthquake brought about. If I can be of any help, please don’t hesitate to let me know. If necessary, I will call on my classmates to make a donation to you to help you go through the difficultly.
Never give up hope and be strong! Longing for good news from you!
Yours Sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】这是一篇提纲式作文,要求同学们给美国遭遇地震的好友写一封慰问信。文章主要包括得知情况与感受,表达安慰与鼓励,打算提供的帮助三个部分。一方面朋友刚受到地震的伤害,同学们要注意语气与情感,另一方面在打算提供的帮助部分一定要写出具体的行动是什么不要泛泛而谈。
在行文过程中,要注意长短句结合,避免句式单一。将平时积累的短语和优秀的句型用到文章中来,使文章更加出彩。
【范文亮点】优秀词汇和短语:awfully非常地,糟糕地;As long as 只要;hesitate 犹豫;If necessary如果必要。
优秀句式和行文脉络:
1.I’m awfully sorry to hear that a horrible and severe earthquake unexpectedly hit your hometown and caused a great loss. I am writing to express my deepest sympathy for you.
这里用了I’m awfully sorry to hear that ……和I am writing to ……交代了写信的原因和目的,引出正文。
2.文章运用 However、As long as、and 等词是行文更流畅,而且全文逻辑清晰,观点鲜明,最后还表明自已愿意给予帮助并期待来信。