Question

【题目】Everyone has an experience they would rather forget. Some are embarrassing, some are moving, and some teach us a lesson. Here is a story of mine.

Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two hours later, I didn’t catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home.

Just then, I saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldn’t believe my ears. “Yes. It’s very important to be patient,” the old man said. “Don’t consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently. I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didn’t move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This made me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish.

On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was patience.

[写作内容]

1、以约30个词概括短文的要点；

2、然后以约120个词写一篇记叙文，描写你认识到耐心的重要性的一次经历，并包括如下的要点：

1）叙述你认识到耐心的重要性的一次真实或虚构的经历；

2）你是如何认识到耐心的重要性的；

3）耐心对你的生活、学习有什么影响。

[写作要求]

1、在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

（请将作文写在答题卷作文区。）

Answer 1

【答案】

Patience is the secret of success

This passage is mainly about the writer’s experience of fishing and was taught an unforgettable lesson by an old man for being impatient. He knew the importance of patience and finally got some fish.

It occurs to me that a similar story of mine happened 3 years ago and taught me a lesson. One day, I waited for the bus at the stop for 30 minutes, no bus came. I couldn’t wait any longer and decided to walk to school. But no sooner had I left than the bus arrived. I thought if I had waited for one more minute, I would have caught it. If I wanted to take the next bus, I would have to wait for another 30 minutes.

Only then did I realize the importance of patience. Being impatient will waste all the efforts that we have made.

In my opinion, patience plays an important part in our study and work. With it we can achieve greater success. Now, whenever I am to lose my patience, I’ll think of the experience of waiting for a bus.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于阅读任务型写作，根据所给的阅读材料可以看出是有关作者难忘的一件事，就是钓鱼要有耐心。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读所给材料，弄清材料所提供的信息，告诉我们什么道理。2、所给的写作内容就是文章的总体框架，要在写作内容的范围内进行构思和想象。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态，第一人称。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如It occurs to me that…用it作形式主语；But no sooner had I left than the bus arrived.和Only then did I realize the importance of patience.都用了倒装句；I thought if I had waited for one more minute, I would have caught it.用了if虚拟条件句；whenever I am to lose my patience,用了让步状语从句。此外，文章还使用了大量短语plays an important part in；occurs to me等。这些高级句式和短语词汇的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。