Question

20．假定你是高中生李华．你的美国笔友约翰对中国今年流行的电子红包（electronic red envelope）很感兴趣，发来邮件向你咨询有关信息．请你给他回一封邮件，内容包括：
1）发红包的由来；
2）电子红包的用途：商家促销，娱乐，还款；
3）你的看法．
注意：
1）词数不少于100；
2）开头和结尾已经给出，但不计入总字数；
3）可适当增加细节，以使文章连贯
Dear John，
I would like to tell you more about a new trend in China-delivering electronic red envelopes．
           ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息写作要求就当下流行的一个发红包的现象给出描述，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：要写清楚发电子红包的由来，电子红包的用途：节日的祝福，商家促销，娱乐，还款等．最后表明自己对发红包这一现象的看法或观点．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：想要做某事 would like to do sth．；发红包 deliver electronic red envelopes；为了做某事 in order to do sth；send out发出
The Chinese give red envelopes with cash to children during the Spring Festival and to new couples at their wedding parties．（高分句型一）
Electronic red envelopes are mainly sent by companies in order to earn more profit．（高分句型二）
Delivering electronic red envelopes is a good way to keep Chinese tradition alive．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear John，
       I would like to tell you more about a new trend in China-delivering electronic red envelopes．
       Traditionally，red envelopes represent good luck．The Chinese give red envelopes with cash to children during the Spring Festival and to new couples at their wedding parties．（高分句型一）However，many people sent out their New Year's greetings through electronic red envelopes this year．
       Electronic red envelopes are mainly sent by companies in order to earn more profit．（高分句型二）Some people send electronic red envelopes to kids or friends for fun．Sometimes，one can even pay back money by sending electronic red envelopes．
       Delivering electronic red envelopes is a good way to keep Chinese tradition alive．（高分句型三）High technology is making our lives more and more convenient and interesting．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．